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SOAP SUD WATER
Contributed by
poewhit
on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 10:24:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Last night bath a thrill.
Down the pipe-into the tube.
Water gone-TV. image perfect world.
Into the mix ,the soap sud bath water.
FOOL down the road need a drink.
Goes to the worn out sink.
Turn the tap and to his surprise.
BUBBLES from last week bath high.
FOOL said,"WATER HAS A STINK".
That bathroom water in my sink.
TASTES like last weeks bath-I THINKS.
FOOL drank the water any way.
ACID-RAIN mixed with the soap GOOD.
HIS HEART GAVE OUT-FOOL TURNED PINK.
SO THE BATH WATER FROM THE SINK.
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Re: SOAP SUD WATER
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by UrMyInspiration on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 12:54:29 PM AEST
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| This is funny... I enjoyed reading it! |
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Re: SOAP SUD WATER
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 06:21:33 PM AEST
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Poewhit, please correct me if I'm wrong, but I don't think you meant this as funny at all. You live in a big city? You got crappy drinking water, crappy living conditions? That was my take on this piece. If that's not where you're coming from, I still thankyou for getting me fired up. I read this and thought how friggen sad. I then read the comment about being funny and thought there isnt a damn thing funny about this. Hey I can't say though what that person took from your poem either so I am not saying what they commented was wrong. (dont wanna sound mean). The piece just kinda touched me. It reminded me a lot of the homeless problem we have and the poverty and the children with hungry bellies, right here in the US of A.
Ok Im done rambling, my friend. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: SOAP SUD WATER
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by yangdantien on
Thursday, 25th January 2007 @ 07:32:18 PM AEST
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This has a mad rambling of familiarity particular to the modern nomadic existence it also can be described as "scratches on the page making noise." Either way what a trip.
Good Job
Peace
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