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Child Behind a Window
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 11:01:44 PM in AEST
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Sometimes, I feel just like
a child behind
a window
Watching all the others play
and wishing
he could too.
Punished for some awful thing
like simply being
human
Banished from the laughter
and there's nothing
he can do.
Trying not to cry
he bites his lip
and presses closer
Every stinging breath
creating fog
upon the glass.
Captive to the powers
who control his fate
and fortune
Drowning in self pity
while the endless...
hours...
pass.
L. Carling c2007
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
... [
2007-01-28 23:01:44]
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by yangdantien on
Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 11:22:39 PM AEST
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The pacing puts me on the window sill too. In times past to watch the leaves & wind dance, snowfalls and often to wish to be out there playing ball. The flow leads to realize our greatest enemy is self pity.
Excellent
Peace
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 01:58:13 AM AEST
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I agree with yangdantien... the pace is intoxicating... and really twists one's perspective. Yes, I , too, fell in here. It's impossible to explain quite how - but it feels quite right to say I did. The only question really (and I actually did pause to ponder this) is whether our noses are pressed upon the same side of the glass.........
Looking out or in, as yet undetermined,
~Snemmy
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by purplestary on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 05:49:05 AM AEST
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| brilliant write, and so relatable. nicely done. |
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by joe-joe on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 02:49:22 PM AEST
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| I know this feeling well, like most of us, I believe. I enjoyed the place this write took my soul...nice write.... |
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th January 2007 @ 08:44:06 PM AEST
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Larry, my dear friend .. what is causing the child to deny
himself the pleasure?
I was reduced to tears .. remembrances and the like gripped my
heart so very tightly, I could barely breathe. You have captured
something here that is both painful to witness and suffer.
(come on out and play ~ )
~ Breezy |
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 03:05:15 PM AEST
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I have a cat, an absolutely extraordinary cat that I watch sitting at the window from the outside looking in as if he's reciting this piece! Not very long, I let him in. A very pausing to ponder pace, as others have said. Good write!
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by MisfitMe on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 05:32:58 PM AEST
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Oh, my...how poetically painful!
Brilliant lamentation!!!
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 7th February 2007 @ 09:27:32 PM AEST
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Dearest Larry I can't begin to express to you what emotions your write stirred up within me my dear poet friend. Such pain and sadness, I could picture it all inside my head.
You never cease to amaze me. I hope to
one day move my reader the way that you do~
You are a true poetic master.
with love n hugs from ur fan,
sue m |
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 02:52:58 AM AEST
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I like this poem,(I like it a lot) the layout perfectly compliments the content.It leaves such a feeling of loneliness,
Den |
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Re: Child Behind a Window
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 1st April 2007 @ 08:21:24 AM AEST
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In my very first experience on a healers table I was given the vision of a small girl inside a log cabin looking out. She looked so innocent and sad. I knew from within she was me but my spirit guide told me that is the part of you who will stay inside that cabin and keep guard and take any pain you have from that child you were. He named her Auriel and she became my healer of the pain of my youth. Now she has completed her task and taken the pains away.I see her now dancing outside the cabin in a forest filled with dancing flowers.
Your piece brought me back to this beautiful and healing moment....I just had to share that with you. It was Magic what these words did. |
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