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Golden Yellow Sun
Contributed by
Jyssvw
on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 02:04:37 PM in AEST
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Have you ever sat and cried thinking about me
Have the days passed you by, or have they hardly
Dear old friend, it was a swell time spent, no regret
Dear no one I know longer, how have you been lately, I forget
To much sugar in a salad of overloaded tomatoes and red peppers
To much to remember in cold water, blasting, summer, rain showers
Its clear I was meant for someone elses arms, hands, and painted toes
I was led to the place, the scene, and survived, surrounded by foes
Have you ever stopped, wondered where I was right there and then
Have you ever seen the golden sun misplaced then overshoot the horizon
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Jyssvw
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Re: Golden Yellow Sun
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 03:57:57 PM AEST
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very creative.. I like how you asked questions and compared things.. good imagery thanks for sharing
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Re: Golden Yellow Sun
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 05:20:33 PM AEST
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Jyssvw, I really like the creative style you have composed here and would hope to read more from you. Wonderful poem.
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Re: Golden Yellow Sun
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st January 2007 @ 09:46:57 PM AEST
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Jyss .. this was incredibly potent .. and thought provoking.
(I love that)
The rhymes are exquisite! They are hardly noticeable,
which makes them blend all the more. There is no
competition for attention here, allowing the meanings
of your words to shine. (Like diamond-studded
snow on a sun-filled winter day)
Excellent stuff here, my friend.
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Re: Golden Yellow Sun
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by brew on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 06:49:14 AM AEST
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What a great choice of words.for the one you did have and now is gone....but are they?! Images, that surpress throught the mind.....Great work, as always. You J always shine, in my book
Brew~ |
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