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Crimson Raindrops
Contributed by
purplestary
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Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 07:09:20 AM in AEST
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Crimson Raindrops, Release your pain
with the weight of the world bearing down on your shoulders.
Reflections of all things and moments you've lost
Pulsating through the red pool.
Questions run rampage through your weary mind
like, do our efforts go on unrequited?
How hard it must be watching life surround you,
knowing it is all completely unreachable
despite how palpable it seams.
As heavy the weight of everyone problems
you still can't let go, you can't give up now.
You know their all watching, and counting on you
The ones who despise you are waiting for failure.
This is your chance to get something right,
Prove yourself worthy, you must win this fight.
While carrying this boulder down the long rocky road
remember the basics, and lift with the knees,
never look back, stop only for air,
keep your eyes on the goal,
and fear nothing ahead.
When obstacles arise to slow down your journey
never lose faith and always keep trying.
Never believe a word that your told
just follow your heart, body, and soul.
Remember that you are never alone
as long as you keep me in your possession.
If you so happen to run out of paper
remember that extra ammo is not hard to find.
Your words are your strength, and tears are NOT weakness
Pride has no value, and dreams are worth dreaming.
lend me your hand and together we'll fight.
The weight of the world bearing down on your shoulders,
a one man job, for a reason unknown.
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 10:29:00 AM AEST
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purplestary, I want to begin by thanking you for sharing a little of yourself and especially your wonderful talent of poetic literature with us all. The part I most enjoyed through this read was actually the closing. "The weight of the world bearing down on your shoulders,
a one man job, for a reason unknown." How true this is for so many. Awesome poem.
Mickey Pig Knuckles
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 10:53:21 AM AEST
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a very heartfelt write.. oh how we all feel the weight of the world on us at times.. this is a truly wonderful piece of poetry.. thanks for sharing awesome job
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 1st February 2007 @ 05:55:10 PM AEST
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A deep, moving & heartfelt write. You have penned this very well indeed. Your closing lines ring a bell with many. Well done and thanks so much for posting this~
warm hugs,
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by Bleedthelove on
Friday, 2nd February 2007 @ 11:30:13 AM AEST
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"Your words are your strength, and tears are NOT weakness
Pride has no value, and dreams are worth dreaming.
lend me your hand and together we'll fight." Those are beautiful words. Awesome piece.
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 5th February 2007 @ 03:28:54 PM AEST
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In a candle lit room with red curtains I can see this being told to children as an admonishment upon entering into the world as an adult quite like the scene in Hamlet where a parents (Polonius) guidance states the immortal words "...never a borrower or lender be..."
Excellent guidance from these wise words.
Good Job
Peace
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 9th February 2007 @ 07:17:59 AM AEST
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This was a very well written poem. It brought alot of things to my mind when reading this. Great job. You did an amazing job puting your expressions into this poem.
Take care
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by myheartsvoice on
Friday, 23rd February 2007 @ 03:43:32 PM AEST
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like a rare work of art, a painting of great value and distinction, this, is what i just read up above. Beautiful work you have penned here.
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by needledancing on
Monday, 25th June 2007 @ 03:30:52 AM AEST
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| A tremendous amount of courage and strength have been passed along with the mere reading of these words. For all who have a journey to travel I wish they could read these words for it would abolish any thought of defeat or failure of any kind. My heart to you for sending out such a message of total faith and conquering power attained.Thank you. |
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Re: Crimson Raindrops
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th September 2007 @ 11:35:09 AM AEST
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" How hard it must be watching life surround you, knowing it is all completely unreachable"
this line is awsome, realy hit me hard. Your
writting is beyond it's years. Beautiful work.
bjps
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