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If
Contributed by
steven_fenton1982
on
Sunday, 4th February 2007 @ 04:29:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Since you left me,
the moon resembles only a light,
the stars look just like teardrops,
the night is just an end to the day,
and the morning is broken by emptiness.
Since you left me,
the clouds look a little fuller,
the rain seems to hit a little harder,
the wind just blows even colder,
and the silence cuts straight through me.
If I could stare into your eyes just one more time,
I would never want to look away,
If I could kiss your tender lips just one more time,
I would never want to break away,
and If I only had three remaining words,
I'd hold you so close and say "I love you"
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steven_fenton1982
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2007-02-04 16:29:59]
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Re: If
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 4th February 2007 @ 05:55:06 PM AEST
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very well expressed feelings in this piece.. its very sad.. I especially loved the stanza before the last stanza.. great wording.. if this love didn't last there is probably someone better for you out there.. just hang in there. awesome expression
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Re: If
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th February 2007 @ 06:18:15 PM AEST
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Yeah I Agree, I'm trying to get over a bad one- sided love. I relate myself to this, not for the kissing since I haven't even kissed once.
this part:
the night is just an end to the day,
and the morning is broken by emptiness
is the one that really hit my mind the most.
I feel exactly like that. But anyway I relate myself like I said to all the poem. That's the
feeling for everything.
Keep on the good writing I really liked this. |
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