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Today, Tomorrow, and Yesterdays
Contributed by
WorthlesSanity666
on
Sunday, 4th February 2007 @ 06:19:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Theres a jingle on the line for better yesterdays
that come hard to recollection.
Please sweep me away from
deserted today,
nothing more than an already forgotten memory.
Hide me from the terrifying tomorrows
that gnash their uncertain teeth
in the face of a dying child.
The winds of change are blowing
and wouldn't you know they're picking up speed.
Copyright ©
WorthlesSanity666
... [
2007-02-04 18:19:46]
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Re: Today, Tomorrow, and Yesterdays
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 4th February 2007 @ 08:10:20 PM AEST
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very interesting write.. it sounds like there is alot of confusion going on .. and uncertanity.. its well expressed. good job
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Re: Today, Tomorrow, and Yesterdays
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 5th February 2007 @ 12:16:06 PM AEST
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I love how a poem is also a tool for understanding. I felt that when reading this as it stretches across the reality of what is being experienced to a place of process & handling the curves and blows of existence especially in the face of the varying speeds of change.
I would add reading your poem aloud while editing may help you find the lyrical flow to become happy with it. Also try removing your self from the piece to get at its core action then if needed reinsert the pronouns to flesh out your expression.
Good Job
Peace
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Re: Today, Tomorrow, and Yesterdays
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 26th February 2019 @ 09:21:00 PM AEST
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| Nice write. |
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