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Sleeping Beauty
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 01:33:42 PM in AEST
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A natural disaster is what has occurred
a soliloquoy of silence like nothing you've heard
This ethereal dance is physically draining
sidestep a defense that's self pertaining
In bruised and swollen streams of emotion
is a knocked-up matinee of catastrophic promotion
Where our lips trail off... holding captive the thought
heartfelt murmurs in tongue and cheek caught
Lost in the prying ambush of self doubt
a withered perversion drenched in sunlit drought
Infinite sadness responds to a distant melody
definitively speaking, this could be a remedy
Shocked by moments with flattering intent
mild displays forfeited by something hell-bent
The fallback to negativity has almost been purged
awakened at last; true beauty emerged.
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hauntedscorp
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 01:47:14 PM AEST
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Gosh I've missed your writes!
This line,
"is a knocked-up matinee of catastrophic promotion "
tickled me no end. It just rolls off the tounge.
But this line,
"Infinite sadness responds to a distant melody "
appeals to my heart, just beautiful! |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 02:29:49 PM AEST
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This maybe the song of Ray Nagin Mayor of New Orleans recited by the rhythm of a march, a dirge after the floods of Katrina during the first funerals with rain still falling but ending on the last line as a fat beams of sunshine bust through clouds and sadness to twinkle in the eyes of the listeners mixing with tears as a prince's kiss.
Which awakens the city to live happily ever after or so we hope.
Bravo
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 04:44:17 PM AEST
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this a very creative and well penned out piece.. I love the flow and the wording.. it even makes you think.. I love the ending.. it portrays feelings of emerging from alot of hardships to find true inner beauty.. awesome job here
vampyress jenni |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by brew on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 08:13:14 PM AEST
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Of course, my sweet TWIN............Man, I missed you so. How have you been, and to see this from you....well I know all so true, you want such happiness. I feel there is, in the end as you stated. Miss Scropie, stop hiding, WE MISSYOU!!!!!!!!
Love and hugs
Brew~ |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 21st February 2007 @ 06:12:13 AM AEST
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Awesome writing, friend.
Big huggs,
emy
Great to read you again. |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st February 2007 @ 10:11:40 AM AEST
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Scorpy, scorpy, scorpeh. It really is nice to see you back and posting. And as well, a little light at the end of the tunnel, no?
Very beautiful. The flow and transitions work well, and it truly is a lovely piece to read.
Told you, keep your head up, we're scorpio's remember? Gotta fight for everything lol.
Very glad I had the chance to read this, hopefully they'll be more to come. Ya know - not after 3 months lol,
-Cassy |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 01:17:55 AM AEST
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Your works are beautiful Scorp..
beauty can ALWAYS be found in the old addage that says, there is truth in honesty..
(any expression at all, of course, far beyond the obvious intent implyed merely by those few words..lol)
my own take..
especially, by the sentiments set forth in the final stanza.. particularly the final line-
your metamorphosis.. as it were
shutting up now*
B
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by wizard on
Sunday, 25th February 2007 @ 10:50:57 PM AEST
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always a pleasure to read your magnificent work... this was great!
wiz |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 04:19:04 AM AEST
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Well,O haunted one with sting in tail.
Your rhyming,as always,is on an elevated plain.Some great lines here,my favourite?
'Lost in the prying ambush of self doubt'
That's a cracker!
Very apt title,to a very good poem,
Den |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Whisper on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 02:11:57 PM AEST
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Wow there's a mouth full of words . LOL
Good write this. The end lines were perfect.
Thank you for sharing
Whisper
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 06:28:18 PM AEST
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Scorpy .. it's a helluva fight, no?
I am quite impressed and envious of your ability to write of these darker
more incessant emotions. I start something dark .. and that damn angel
of hope creeps in to turn the ending around.
(she is beginning to annoy me)
In any case, hun .. this was brilliant from beginning to end.
A flawless execution of what was .. what is .. and what has
become. It's perfect! I've missed you. And your writes.
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 4th March 2007 @ 01:00:54 AM AEST
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| Superb ...after this long legend of praise should absolutely surfice. Well done. Standing ovation and all.thank you |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by MisfitMe on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 06:17:04 PM AEST
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Imagine my surprise when I came to your page, to return the favor of a comment &...well, no favor needed...only found. Found in your words, which, by the way, can ya' tell I'm impressed by? teehee
Seriously, there is an eloquence here belonging to a true wordsmith, at least in my esteem & therefore, I offer you not simply a comment in return, but, my sincere admiration of your writing!
BigLoveMuchPeace
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 26th March 2007 @ 01:59:02 AM AEST
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This slippery little sucker slipped right past me you know. I s'pose it's my fault for not been around for a while hey, lol. Guess what I have caught up on your writes now, yay, lol.
Miss Scorpy, what can I say without sounding
like I'm always repeating myself?
You're a very clever & talented poetess who delivers the best powerful, most emotive and outstanding writes that move her reader every time. To sum it all up. You can't keep a good woman down. Show 'em what ya made of Scorpy~
much love n hugs ur fan/friend,
Sue M |
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by Tracy on
Wednesday, 18th January 2012 @ 06:24:31 AM AEST
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"In bruised and swollen streams of emotion
is a knocked-up matinee of catastrophic promotion
Where our lips trail off... holding captive the thought
heartfelt murmurs in tongue and cheek caught"
Wow! Just adored this part!!! Great job! : )
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Re: Sleeping Beauty
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 13th April 2014 @ 04:16:13 PM AEST
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exquisite flawless perfection, truly sooo beautiful!
hugs n' love nessa
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