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!Hey You!
Contributed by
FrogHoppin
on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 09:06:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
sarcasticpoetry
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Wake Up!
Hey you
w/o a clue...
Do you even remember coming unglued
You'll be spared
having to care...
For as long as you sport that vacant stare
Medicate
& situate...
Your accommodations w/ the state
Within this gloom
nothing blooms...
And here at last, we've come to your room
Hung 'til dead
is what is said...
Of the girl whose blood now stains your bed
Never clever
to endever...
A return to the life, from which now severed
No more love
from above...
For what is now, only a shell of
Hey you
w/o a clue...
Do you even remember, coming unglued
Wake Up!
Copyright ©
FrogHoppin
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2007-02-20 21:06:08]
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Re: !Hey You!
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 09:25:01 PM AEST
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I hear this in the morning just before I wake up it was issued as an alarm clock instead of a buzzer.
This piece also brought me to the obligatory title:
Don't give in without a fight.
Open your heart, I'm coming home.
And the worms ate into his brain.
Together we stand, divided we fall.
Just the last lines to honor striving for a clue.
Good Job
Peace
Yang
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Re: !Hey You!
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 21st February 2007 @ 11:11:06 AM AEST
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| Great...it does have a flow...and I love the rhyme...Well done |
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Re: !Hey You!
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by CuriousitysCat on
Friday, 23rd February 2007 @ 09:59:33 PM AEST
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YAY!!!! Whoa, I love it, like most of your writing. ;]
"For as long as you sport that vacant stare
Medicate
& situate... "
Yessssss, it works every now and then for a bit until you turn around to see you been bitten, bitten on the ASS! But hey some are completely satisfied in their vicious circle. It can be enticing sometimes...Oh no relapse. Oops well it all makes sense. Love it!
Buh-bye,
~ME |
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