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Open Flow
Contributed by
CuriousitysCat
on
Friday, 23rd February 2007 @ 09:54:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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I look at this inspiration
And find a new thrilling
Sensation
Still me
I let myself be
Forever pine
Listening to the
Grapevine
Let it flow through, through you
From your head and down your
Spine
So step in line
And look to find
The designated place
Where you sign
I flip it up
So it no longer slips up
Tea with the Mad Hatter
Inside this room
Filled the cup
Let it flow through, through you
From your taste buds to
Your lips
Look at lil' man blue
Say 'SUP?'
And expect the golden that fills
To swim through the air
And listen for no reply
Hear the familiar zip
Let's fly
Cut through
O2
Back before 'US'
In the Paleoproterozoic era
Let it flow through, through you
From your pre-conceived notions
through clocked sands
Into all oceans
We wish
Feel the experience speed over
Gracing your nerves
Endings show
And we'll find our new beginnings...
~JaZz
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CuriousitysCat
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2007-02-23 21:54:17]
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Re: Open Flow
(User Rating: 1 )
by MisfitMe on
Friday, 23rd February 2007 @ 10:45:48 PM AEST
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Wow & Double Wow on this, ' Altered State ' journey, as this is much like I imagined the quest taken in the book, ( movie...not so good )
"Back before 'US'
In the Paleoproterozoic era
Let it flow through, through you
From your pre-conceived notions
through clocked sands
Into all oceans"
BLMP~Misfitmum
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Re: Open Flow
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by yangdantien on
Saturday, 24th February 2007 @ 02:04:34 PM AEST
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For me this is the song of the Neutrino. Born from the great furnace points and shards fleet to the 4 corners of the universe and cast a reflecting surface for the Gods to look upon or greater view.
The style of tight rhyme that leads to a changing pulse and use of common speech blending with literature and science gives this piece a wide comprehensive platform for the reader to explore and perhaps breathe into their being "new beginnings".
Bravo
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Open Flow
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 26th February 2007 @ 02:05:19 PM AEST
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Very uniquie and uplifting your writting is and beautifuly presented.
Ben
the
artist
formerly
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myheartsvoice. |
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Re: Open Flow
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by ginabelle on
Monday, 23rd November 2009 @ 12:19:26 AM AEST
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| Your play on words is amazing! It really causes one to think about the real message, not what's just on the surface. Excellent! |
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