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~ Turns ~
Contributed by
misfitme
on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 07:49:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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How many times~
across the sky has come
The silver path of moon~
in turn with gold of sun...
How many days~
have into yester turned
While suffered is the absence~
of that for yearned...
How many turns~
have the seasons taken
Since last to their glory~
I was awakened...
How many years~
have I turned in age
Without pen known to hand~
or word to page...
How many tomorrows~
have yet to unfold
Before want of them by~
I am again made bold...
How many more questions~
not met by answer
'Til music returns~
to the forgotten dancer...
~me
?
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misfitme
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 08:51:01 PM AEST
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This is mystifying, as for writters block, there's always tomorrow or perhaps a moment from now, worry not it'll come to you and like a moon beam in the night it'll gleam in your imagination. you'll be there to catch it. in any case beautiful poem as usual. No writter's block on your presentaion or poetic skills.
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by Caz on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 08:59:56 PM AEST
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| aww i love this. i think it's one of the best i have read yet, true from the heart. and thats what i love best about it. |
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 28th February 2007 @ 11:07:11 PM AEST
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Now that you have had this you stand a good chance of coming back even stronger than before. Writer's block is not just an obstacle, it's a sign to the writer that there is something that needs fixing. As with an athlete whose injury is caused by bad form or poor technique, if the training works to correct that inadequacy, the athlete returns with less chance of re-injury. This is your opportunity to not only tape yourself back together, but to actually get yourself in prime writing shape, ready to tackle the projects that excite and challenge you.
Many Blessings
AJ |
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 01:58:37 AM AEST
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This is very nicely expressed, in lyrical language which is very well done, except... well, there are a lot of inverted/shuffled elements in the lines, where words are placed other than in their normal order in a sentence. While that's perfectly acceptable in many languages, say, Latin, it's difficult sometimes in English, which relies often on word-order to get its meaning across. Thus, the meaning can be a bit garbled sometimes. It's not so bad as that here, but it did take me a bit of work to understand each line properly. Let not the rhyme ever take priority over the meaning, say I.
All in all, though, I liked this. A powerful sentiment, and of course the subject of writer's block is a close one for most of us. Good luck, and keep it up.
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by FRANCO on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 02:23:48 AM AEST
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poetry is a trickling cascade of thoughts that must flows through smoothly for the readers to gather.
You sure have that in you, you have the flawless flow of verses decorating your poem. which is truly wonderful.
hugs.
FRANCO.
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 04:50:37 AM AEST
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Ah,many questions.The answer?
That forgotten dancer is up on the floor,Strauss is playing and the waltzing has begun again,
Den |
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by Gaurdnangel on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 09:37:50 AM AEST
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Very nicely done. Captures the true esence deeply buried within most of our thoughts.
God Bless |
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 12:05:40 PM AEST
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Very strong write. Well received by me. I can relate.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by sadaddy on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 03:25:30 AM AEST
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I truly am baffled by the amount energy that you have in your writes. I see no writers block in this write. You continue to write masterful pieces of work. We all go trough periods that we don’t feel like writing or we really can’t think about writing because of other things happening to us in our lives. So, pick yourself up and dust yourself off and just continue to let the juices flow. Because you are a experienced writer and have what it takes to be a magnificent writer.
sadaddy
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd March 2007 @ 03:10:38 PM AEST
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KerryLynne~
I found this to be utterly cleansing, and not only for you, I suspect.
I believe, especially when one is having difficulties articulating thought,
that writing out emotions and sentiments breaks through those barriers
that would otherwise prevent a work of art. (Pulling out Poe or Keats also
helps .. at least it does ME .. :P)
I am completely captivated by the third stanza .. it's breathtaking ~
If this is the result of writer's block, I envy you. I am acquainted with
many (myself included), who cannot write a single word when
suffering from the affliction. This, dear poet, may well be the finest,
"blockage" of words I've had the pleasure to read.
~Breezy |
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Re: ~ Turns ~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th March 2007 @ 02:23:21 PM AEST
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For one who has danced unforgettable dances, 'tis beguiling to imagine the "forgotten dancer"! Beautiful work, Missy.
wabl
KenMoore
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