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~DICE~
Contributed by
misfitme
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Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 03:07:59 PM in AEST
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Made to dance in the palm~
of a loosely balled fist
Where lady lucks sweet breath blew~
in want of fates assist...
Fortunes own shining duo~
polished to entice
Young fiends from their innocents~
to pay the pipers price...
At last with the flick of a wrist~
& the out folding of fingers
Chances self is given to flight~
in which no caution lingers...
Once down touch the tumbling pair~
allowing no look back
Destiny settles into place~
before the bets upon her stacked...
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misfitme
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2007-03-06 15:07:59]
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Re: ~DICE~
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by FRANCO on
Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 06:55:34 PM AEST
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Gambling is an Universal fever infected by lady luck Virus, and you have visualized the entire scenario beautifully in words.
great write.
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Re: ~DICE~
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 6th March 2007 @ 08:54:03 PM AEST
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This piece evoked "Alea iacta est."
Before madness sets in as an insider's credo: If they're not throwing you out, you're doing something wrong.
And here in lies perhaps the pieces intent making its case for destiny's behalf that some should never wager at all.
Bravo
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Re: ~DICE~
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 7th March 2007 @ 08:30:44 PM AEST
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Young fiends from their innocents~ to pay the pipers price... Great line, nice flow and description in to this world of dreams and illusion. lovely poetry as always.
Ben
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Re: ~DICE~
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th March 2007 @ 11:56:21 AM AEST
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I LOVE Dice! Both this beautifully penned poem and those square little suckers! 'Specially five of 'em in Yahtzee! They call me "Mr. Yahtzee." I love all five of 'em heedin' my call t' show up together identical from my laid out palm! 'Specially 'n' most often the sixes! Boxcars times two 'n' a half! Great work, Missy!
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: ~DICE~
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 05:51:41 PM AEST
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Makes me wanna head straight to Vegas, which, incidently, is my dog's name : )
I'm sure most of us know (and have experienced) gambling's haunting tune that lulls one in... but who knew it could also be poetic when penned by a talented Miss?!?
Thanks for the read : )
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Re: ~DICE~
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by CuriousitysCat on
Saturday, 28th April 2007 @ 01:35:35 AM AEST
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YAY FOR GAMBLING!
teehee.
I loooooved this really though.
;]
"Fortunes own shining duo~
polished to entice
Young fiends from their innocents~
to pay the pipers price..."
You can not imagine how this stanza drew me to it.
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Re: ~DICE~
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by needledancing on
Saturday, 9th June 2007 @ 10:28:05 PM AEST
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| Excellent. I think we have all experienced the pull of that power...that one chance that we could win. Very powerful draw lady luck can have on us. A fantastic piece. |
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Re: ~DICE~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th June 2007 @ 02:41:02 AM AEST
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Well,you certainly got into the mind of your friend ,and this worked tremendously well.
'Fortunes own shining duo'...I won't be forgetting that little gem.
Enjoyed this one,well captured,
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Re: ~DICE~
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by Dom on
Thursday, 9th August 2007 @ 06:01:39 PM AEST
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Like many other vices it can be so easy to always say "just once more and I'll get lucky...". The trick is knowing when to stop or it can be a downwards spiral.
Great write, you really got inside your friend's mind for this one!
Take care,
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