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As the Tide comes over me
Contributed by
gequetscht
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Tuesday, 25th February 2003 @ 05:40:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Misery washes around my dark heart
Maybe it will take it away
To another, better place
...somewhere..
The tide washes over me
Who will be there to hold my hand
When it pulls me under
I want a better life to live
Though it will only be a lie
Now I want it take me away
To some place new
Without repent and anguish
Will there be one existing just for me?
Theres no sense soothing this yearning anymore
The longing, that one dream
It breaks me apart like little sticks
I stand here
As the day light falls on the side
Where the sea meets the land
Its shores are reason and desire
The tide alone is so merciless
And a being pushes me to go
Nothing remains for me here
...forever..
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Re: As the Tide comes over me
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by Tanna on
Tuesday, 25th February 2003 @ 09:46:54 AM AEST
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| Excellent write, you definately portray the yearning, longing and confusion that you feel. |
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Re: As the Tide comes over me
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by Varro on
Tuesday, 25th February 2003 @ 03:28:37 PM AEST
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This shows deep emotion, and I became absorbed in your personal struggle. It touches right to the heart, but even though it seems pessimistic, there is an underlying stress on hope...like your image of tides and the shore...the sea washes everything clean. Nicely done.
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Re: As the Tide comes over me
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 25th February 2003 @ 05:04:31 PM AEST
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| brilliant...so sad... |
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