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Freedom I Breathe.
Contributed by
FRANCO
on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 12:36:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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That time of the year; I was just nine,
walked beneath lash garden trees, laid in fine line;
teasing nippy current of air nibbled my cheeks,
as I heard a song of a cuckoo bird - its wasnt a trick..
Jumping and hopping joyously she the cuckoo bird
flew freely from tree to tree, my, my, said I -
why arent you like the bird I know that nests
in the clock on the wall so high?
Whats so great this bird that nests
in the clock on the wall so high? she queried;
me with pride said, shes my friend
sings hour after hour every hour without a dent.
I resumed, She neither flies nor cries
her eyes dry and never shiest cared by all,
dwells in a home of her own; she neither
Eats nor drinks, sings every hour with no end.
I pity her though, the cuckoo cried. Look at me,
I m free, I may sing or may not on every tree,
happens to be my wish, bcause I m free and you
better believe - that is the way I live, if not, I cease to breathe.
Freedom is all that I need to recite the song you read,
liberty I inhale to match sweet nightingale, if not I cease to breathe.
-FRANCO-
Copyright ©
FRANCO
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2007-03-14 00:36:58]
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 01:24:36 AM AEST
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| The song of freedom and put in your wonderful style of simple natural understanding. It puts me in mind of something I would hear from the lips of a tibetan monk to teach a child the meaning of freedom. |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 03:33:38 AM AEST
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Beautiful, I love how you've used the comparision between the free cuckoo and the cuckoo in the clock that is trapped in an endlessly monotonous cycle in order to convey your point. Very well done,
Dom |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 03:45:26 AM AEST
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| Wonderful..freadom is all that I need to recite the song you read. :-)venkat |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by RICHARD_CAMPBELL on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 10:32:52 AM AEST
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| very good.keep it up.i like how u used your mind in this write. |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by MisfitMe on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 08:29:59 PM AEST
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Fanciful & Enchanting!!!
I like this side of you...a lot
BigLove,
~me |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 09:10:01 PM AEST
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oh Franco, you have touched on a very defining and emotional fact of the poet. The freedom just to write ..
I SO understand where you are coming from here. Stanzas, rhymes and the words that are the cohesiveness
of the piece itself are the life-blood of the poet. Truly. Without this "freedom of expression", what is the poet
to do? Emotions would bottle inside the heart and soul until they explode, taking the poet with them ... Yes,
your last two lines are utter and complete perfection, my friend.
The piece was entirely enlightening and beautiful. And for me, death would certainly befall, were I not be
allowed the freedom to not only, pen, but read exceptional poetry such as found right here on your page.
Enchanting and superb, my friend.
~Breezy |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 09:17:58 PM AEST
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This is the addendum to the state motto of New Hampshire.
Brilliant
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by emystar on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 04:29:49 AM AEST
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Very beautifull.
I luv your analogy.
big huggs, always freedom,
emy |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 09:17:27 PM AEST
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Excellent Excellent
Masterful flow. |
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Re: Freedom I Breathe.
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 29th April 2007 @ 01:50:35 PM AEST
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absolutely beautiful!!!
love n' hugs nessa
roses |
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