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Eve's Song
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True
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Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 10:01:59 AM in AEST
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Amid the mist and dappled shadows
Beneath the trees and across the stream
I used to walk in carefree freedom
A soft and gentle perfect dream
And I led a blessed life
Grace and beauty did abound
Until that fateful cursed day
And that fateful cursed sound
A twig snapped as it gave way
Beneath the foot of a winged man
But he laughed and smiled sweetly
As only an angel can
And he sang a song of love
And captured me within his spell
And so in beauty and grace I rose
And so through beauty and charm I fell
For in the song of sweet devotion
There ran an insidious lie
That if only I fell in love too
He would teach me how to fly
And so he danced with me in sunlight
And his voice rang true and strong
And though I tried to walk away then
I couldnt fight his charm for long
And in that moment I became his puppet
And danced upon his golden strings
And though I was not an evil person
For him, I did many evil things
But the one that plagues my dreams
And causes my wounded soul to bleed
Is how I cursed all humanity
And left them to want and need
And this darkness that consumed me
Would eventually kill me in the end
And because of my actions
I was exiled from the land
And now I see my home no longer
It has faded into myth and lore
But I cut my golden threads
I wont be a puppet anymore
Amid the mist and dappled shadows
Beneath the trees and across the stream
I used to walk in carefree freedom
A soft and gentle perfect dream
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Re: Eve's Song
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by Nothingness on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 10:06:48 AM AEST
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Wow! That was beautiful I always like to point out the part that seemed the strongest to me but it was all so wonderful! Although I think the lines I loved the most were
And in that moment I became his puppet
And danced upon his golden strings
And though I was not an evil person
For him, I did many evil things
LOVED it well done!
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Re: Eve's Song
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by doug on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 07:01:53 PM AEST
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This seems to be a departure for
you. You've told a great story here.
I like how you set the atmosphere
at first. Amid the mist and dappled
shadows. That really drew me in.
The story was great as well.
All in all I enjoyed it very much.
Good work , Truly , Doug |
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Re: Eve's Song
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th March 2007 @ 11:44:35 PM AEST
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A very poetic rendition of the fate that befell, our poor Eve.
This is a very old and familiar tune. And one that, I fear,
is played over and over again with new musicians ..
Lovely write, but gosh some of those stanzas really tug
at the old heart strings, especially that last one.
exquisite ~
~Breezy |
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