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Between Heaven And Hell
Contributed by
steven_fenton1982
on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 04:49:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Once I was told I'd never go to Heaven,
so I got myself a ladder and I climbed up to the moon.
It's not heaven but at least I'm now looking down on you,
and when zoomed in you look just like everybody else.
Then I was told I'd go to Hell,
so I held doors for the elderly, and gave blood till I was empty.
It's not hell but being on the floor, I have to look up to you,
and through my clouded eyes you look just like everybody else.
Well maybe you were right,
I can't reach Heaven,
but I don't want to fall to Hell.
So I will climb my ladder once again,
and I will hold onto the sun.
And when It is time to rest,
I shall set with her,
and melt onto the horizon.
And I shall never rise again.
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steven_fenton1982
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2007-04-06 04:49:20]
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Re: Between Heaven And Hell
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by Loriann on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 05:39:26 AM AEST
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This is just a beautiful write. I really liked this.
Good Job.
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Re: Between Heaven And Hell
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 06:30:14 AM AEST
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This was beautifully creative. I liked this a lot. You did a wonderful job on creating a picture of what heaven would be for you as well as hell and to look at that person and see that they are the same no matter what. Great poem.
Take care
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Re: Between Heaven And Hell
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 08:48:48 AM AEST
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this is great
i love the different take you took on these words |
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Re: Between Heaven And Hell
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by emystar on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 11:31:54 AM AEST
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I agree very creative.
I'd say the person that told you you'd never go to heaven needs to regroup and take stock in them self.
Awesome work and beautifull.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Between Heaven And Hell
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by needledancing on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 03:10:19 PM AEST
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| May I always have a ladder...I shall despite my acrophobia climb right behind you...to the highest heights...well done my friend. |
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Re: Between Heaven And Hell
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by Suzanna on
Friday, 6th April 2007 @ 11:43:07 PM AEST
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Steven, this was an imaginative and capturing poem, you really do have some beautiful imagery in your writing yet i felt slighty sad at the end of this poem. Beautiful.
Nicole. |
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