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So I Wait
Contributed by
The_Phantom
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Saturday, 12th May 2007 @ 05:59:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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Has my day come and gone, has The Phantom been gone far too long,
Have the words faded, can I be recreated,
Shall I start again, or am I spiting into the wind,
What is left of this dying heart, my poetry is slowly falling apart,
A man filled with pain, an existence forgotten amidst the falling rain,
I walk alone, the path I chose is that of the unknown,
Darkness sets, Im over taken by regret,
Thoughts of yesteryear, my soft brown eyes fill with tears,
Memories haunt this soul of mine, scars of the past weight on my mind,
Eight-teen years Ive poured out my heart, what Ive done some would call art,
I would love to go main stream, but I look at my body of work, and Im hit with reality,
My poem arent great they still need work, and sometimes critics can be jerks,
So what does that leave, a world of poetry still unseen?
The Phantom of YPDC is a shadow of himself, cold and alone, can you help,
I call to the poetic Gods, give me back my pen and allow my soul to filter in,
As I stand before the poetic gates, I realize Im not good enough and so I wait.
Forever Faithful
The Phantom
Copyright ©
The_Phantom
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2007-05-12 05:59:23]
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Re: So I Wait
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th May 2007 @ 06:20:44 AM AEST
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Hello Phantom,
I have no idea who you are, but waiting....this is for the birds. Do not allow critics and mainstream ideas to in any way keep you from writing. Sometimes you have to work out of writer's block (or whatever is going on with you). But waiting for a pen, a masterpiece, well poet no offense this is also selling out. Critics can't write poetry. It's as simple as that. That's why they are critics. Those on this site as well who like to criticize work rather than find a genius within are just as well unemotional properly formatted writers. Basically, robot poets. Which is to say they are unrealistic, completely cliche and I couldn't feel them if they were a lighter burning my underside.
While this was a fantastic write and shows a very promising poetic heart and ability it is sad because I tell you poet, do not wait.....for tomorrow we die!
BRAVO!
- SCM |
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Re: So I Wait
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by Kellros on
Saturday, 12th May 2007 @ 08:02:16 AM AEST
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| I agree! The only thing worth waiting for in life is death - and you will. Life's too short to be contradicted by benevolent fools and immaturity, live life to the fullest, day by day! |
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Re: So I Wait
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by shelby on
Saturday, 12th May 2007 @ 09:26:37 AM AEST
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I wondered where you have been? Do not thrust down your pen I would be very sad my friend.
Wayward Souls has been empty without you as well
hugs
Michelle |
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Re: So I Wait
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by emystar on
Saturday, 12th May 2007 @ 11:19:53 AM AEST
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good work friend. We missed you too.
Hang in there and keep writing.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: So I Wait
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by GingerB on
Saturday, 12th May 2007 @ 12:39:28 PM AEST
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We have missed you too, Matt... Hope you and your Lady are well....
Please don't ever stop writing. You are very talented...and this poem shows it.
Hugs to you and Tearsica.
A friend from an island... |
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Re: So I Wait
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by Valerie_Pearson on
Sunday, 13th May 2007 @ 11:07:59 AM AEST
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Phantom,
Good to see you back, praise the poetic pen, your gift is much appreciated, thanks for the wonderful return, Valerie |
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