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Tainted, Dirty and Obscene
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Tuesday, 29th May 2007 @ 02:34:47 AM in AEST
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When thoughts get cluttered and heavy
I try to work you out of my mind
Sweep and mopping and scrubbing
A little silence in the head I find
I sweat and cuss and complain
No I don't much appreciate the cleaning
Beating rugs and bleaching toilets
I think you get my meaning
If I were rich with funds
I'd hire me a maid
Sit back dwelling with these thoughts
Thinking...damn I feel so played
I wish I could clean my life
Like one would tidy up this house
Fix all these things in shambles
Sew new buttons on a worn blouse
Maybe I should rearrange
Try stuff in a whole new light
Maybe I should just sell it all
Yeah, get the old stuff out of sight
Maybe I'll buy up stuff all new
Yeah shiny and virgin clean
Probably become like all else, though
Tainted, dirty and obscene
Written in the wee hours of May 26, 2007
Laura Horner
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Re: Tainted, Dirty and Obscene
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 29th May 2007 @ 02:57:37 AM AEST
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Oh sis,
This is so intense, your feelings so profound.
Entire write speaks volumes..... yes there are times we wish that we could scrub it all away.
Michelle
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Re: Tainted, Dirty and Obscene
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th May 2007 @ 07:14:04 AM AEST
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My dear DH, there is a defining sadness in your words. A very
raw pain that stretches long past these lines and stanzas, hun.
Wow. I have been akin to this emotion ... the painfully strong
desire to just make everything disappear and start from
scratch. It's oh so tempting sometimes. Be strong hun.
Everything works out exactly as it is meant to. I love that
you write about your struggles and sorrow, hun. To me,
it is the beginning of healing .... (and makes for some damn
fine poetry!!)
Excellent write, sis. Perfect word choices from beginning to end ...
~MG |
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Re: Tainted, Dirty and Obscene
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 30th May 2007 @ 10:34:24 AM AEST
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| Laura what a write, I can imagine you in the wee hours" peace my friend. Vincent |
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Re: Tainted, Dirty and Obscene
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 9th June 2007 @ 05:22:10 AM AEST
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Nice write airy and free flowing. You can feel the sense you were trying to convey. Thanks fer sharing
Whisper |
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