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Break Asunder
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Monday, 11th June 2007 @ 11:17:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
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It feels like a weakening illness
Crawling throughout me
Twisting and necrosing
Deeply within the soul of thee
Nausea slowly erodes the lining
Ulcerative areas eat through
Acids and Poisons win this time
The body tardily takes its dues
You say I create my day
If so... why is that not true?
In my creation, man
I would never do what they do
No, love...love is what I found in you
My love it never faltered
Dreams were of you only
Beautiful, raw and unadulterated
There are those weakened times
When entwined hearts may wander
But true hearts never stray
Fracture they may, but never... break asunder
Laura Horner
5-07
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Re: Break Asunder
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by shelby on
Monday, 11th June 2007 @ 11:26:18 AM AEST
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sis,
another hard hitting and sad write. You are a strong woman and I dont say this just because it is the truth.
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Re: Break Asunder
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by Dom on
Monday, 11th June 2007 @ 05:03:57 PM AEST
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Tough to read, to know that another soul is going through so much pain. But to shine through like you have been able to just shows how much inner strength you have.
I love the last stanza, it is lovely and so so honest.
Take care,
Dom |
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Re: Break Asunder
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by Bruce on
Monday, 11th June 2007 @ 06:44:34 PM AEST
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| very well done |
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Re: Break Asunder
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 12th June 2007 @ 12:00:21 AM AEST
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Hi Laura.. This poem was deep and so very raw.. It was amazing and written so truthfully.. You are strong and you can get through this.. Keep your chin up and your head held high.. We are all here for you.. This was a well done poem..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Break Asunder
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th June 2007 @ 01:20:00 AM AEST
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(Love the pic)
Laura, this is such a tremendously powerful piece filled with
an incredible truth. That you have bravely faced the bowels
of despair and survived to spill its blood on the page as you
do, is incredibly admirable and impressive. I adore your
strength and your conviction, as I have stated many times.
Heart-wrenching ... and sad, yet still a positive wonder
surrounds the verses. It swims and never sinks.
Excellence here, dear poet.
~MG |
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Re: Break Asunder
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by Crow on
Tuesday, 12th June 2007 @ 06:40:07 AM AEST
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| a truth in this write, along with truth comes a hardness" you have captured it here..excellent write. Vincent |
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Re: Break Asunder
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 12th June 2007 @ 08:27:16 AM AEST
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wow a very powerful passionate emotional write from you again my dear friend.. beautifully written it hits you right in the heart. I hope all is well with you.. beautiful sad write
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