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Broken is He
Contributed by
DarkCloud
on
Friday, 28th February 2003 @ 02:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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alone on a crowed field, stands a boy
broken is he
just wanting to play, to feel the rush of victory
a winner he could be
if only a chance, a swing for the fence
he could make these fools see
this is his chance to finally be someone
from a broken home is he
away from the violence and heartach
the lies and deceptions
an alcoholic home it must be
his older brother is negetive and violent
abbusive he must be
the boy growing in this chaotic enviroment
depressed he must be
picked on everyday in school
tired is he
giving up on everything
suicidal he must be
drownding out in boose and drugs
become dependant will he
wakes with eyes black and body trembling
slowly dieing a in a sea of misery
wakes one day with courage to change
could this posibly be
sober happy and full of life
a new person could this be
helps others threw past experiences
a life saver is he
now the boy has just tured 20
becoming a man is he
his home a good home
a miricle this could be
a long way in 11 years
yes says he
that little boy.....that boy was me
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DarkCloud
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2003-02-28 14:00:00]
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Re: Broken is He
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by hardcoreputa on
Friday, 28th February 2003 @ 02:08:17 PM AEST
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| wow its great that u changed ur life around like that. its so inspirational. i like the style. its different but i like it. |
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Re: Broken is He
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by olasunkanmi on
Friday, 28th February 2003 @ 02:47:44 PM AEST
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| I love ur style, i also have one of such on the site u can check it out .TITLED RAVEL |
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Re: Broken is He
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by Jeff_Scott_Morehead on
Sunday, 2nd March 2003 @ 09:23:39 PM AEST
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Amazing, I loved the way you told your story.
I often write poetry that tells a story, and this is a very good one.
Thanks for sharing.
jeff |
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Re: Broken is He
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 2nd March 2003 @ 11:59:10 PM AEST
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A great write, DarkCloud.... well written story. However, it needs a great deal of editing for spelling errors....Feel free to contact me if you wish..
Jenni |
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