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Vegas is much to close
Contributed by
StephaniePaige
on
Saturday, 16th June 2007 @ 12:25:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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fooling around on cold nights with spinning bottles
in backseats, or in dark rooms on couches
drinking down the moments far too fast
numbing away all that's wrong
I refuse to regret
I just wish I could forget
the corner of your bed where my head used to lay
and how you'd just laugh when your wrists would ache
now it's all nothing
I guess we'll say that's my fault
for leaving you behind
how could I expect you to stay?
I was the one that walked away
from midnight's cigarrettes and opened windows
from movies that we never watched
why'd you have to feel so much?
why was I so scared?
letting go of what I had
this hurts much less than it seems
there's nothing left for you and me
I'm tripping over what I can't see
slurring words
and running through empty streets
falling against lamp posts
and falling into dirt
I'm trying to say I'm happy
for whatever it's worth
changing who I am
and wishing I was never who I was
can't we just speak?
I'll keep my hands behind my back
cause habitual emotion's something neither of us lack
drinking down a memory
forgetting who I am
I'm letting go of everything
I'll let you walk away
but only for this moment
until I forget
about what I've said
about what you did
I guess there's not that much to miss
letting go of what I had
this hurts less than it seems
there's nothing left for you and me
I'm tripping over what I can't see
slurring words
and running through empty streets
falling back on lamp posts
falling into dirt
I'm trying to say I'm happy for whatever this was ever worth
Copyright ©
StephaniePaige
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2007-06-16 12:25:27]
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Re: Vegas is much to close
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 12:24:10 AM AEST
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Holy heck!!! (and welcome to YPDC)
There is a severe sadness to this that possesses the heart in the worst
way- a break away, but with a very melancholy overtone. It's so gripping!
I especially love the last stanza and the way it was repeated from
above. It gives it a certain credence when it is repeated in this way.
And WOW! what a stanza! It's bloody brilliant. I don't mean to dissect
the piece, as the whole thing, in its entirety is so completely emotion-
filled, but the metaphors in that stanza, alone are enough to impress,
and DAMN! the emotion that is dripping from every line chokes the heart entirely!
Excellent post. First rate write!
~Breezy
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Re: Vegas is much to close
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by shelby on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 01:01:34 AM AEST
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happy welcome to ypdc......
the title caught my eye as Vegas is near me and some of my favorite stomping groud there but the poem was different than I was expecting. Such a sad write you captured sadness and being lonely perfectly.
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Re: Vegas is much to close
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by NoSaint on
Sunday, 17th June 2007 @ 10:04:47 AM AEST
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moving poem much sadness
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