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Sincerely, Me
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 25th June 2007 @ 02:21:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Though it may seem egotistical, I encourage you to take a moment to view the forum post that spurred this. There, amid my rambling, is the poem that started my mind turning. The piece, the fabulous Under One Small Star by the fabulous Wislawa Szymborska, is undeniably, well... fabulous. For the record, I felt a tad badly at first for having thieved the idea and for, too, mirroring her style - but in the end, I realized that my having done so without conscious intent do so only speaks to the power of her poem. For her clarity, her impact and her mastery, she moved me to this. As a poet myself, I cannot help but think that I would be deeply honored if my words were so fully embraced and absorbed that they became as much the reader's thoughts as my own. I do so entirely hope that Wislawa would agree.
The link below will take you to the forum post. And when you read Wislawa's poem, I wish for you
the same sort of osmosis that I experienced. It was, for me, quite healing really.
Forum post
My apologies to the teenage-me for having forgotten
who you were for so very long and for having thought I should grow up.
My apologies to my childhood home for sometimes returning
to it temporarily and for having lacked the bravery to do so permanently.
My apologies to history for looking forward more often than back.
I beg you, those I've not made time for, forgive me for making time
for something else.
Forgive me, time, for so often lamenting your delay when you
are so obviously fleeting.
Forgive me, hope, for calling myself hopeless and meaning it.
Don't hate me, passion, that I so restricted your definition
for all those years.
Forgive me, words, that I avoid you sometimes.
Don't disdain me, silence, that I don't always
respect you.
Please understand, love, that I do so love you
though I never simply say as much.
Forgive me, faith, that mine wasn't what it should be.
My apologies to my soul, that I only sometimes celebrate you.
My apologies to my heart, that I only sometimes hear you.
My apologies to my mind - that I don't fully use you.
Forgive me, God, for ever suggesting that this
is the best I can do with what I have been given.
Forgive me, Fate, for sometimes acting as if
I thought I could control you.
My apologies to light, that my darkness sometimes distorts you
and to darkness, if I've suggested you were not
as important.
Forgive me, health, for not tending to you
as well as I should.
Patience, please have mercy on me.
Innocence, help me to know your wisdom.
And truth, please forgive me my weaknesses.
I apologize...
to every tear I didn't cry for having thought
that I was supposed to smile
to every smile I only half smiled for not
really having wanted to in the first place
to today, for looking forward to the dawn
to yesterday, that I must let you go to
greet tomorrow
and to the moments in between for so often
struggling through you.
My heartfelt apologies to every dream I ever put on hold
for having thought that there was still time
and to myself, for not believing I deserved more
and to everyone-that-isn't-me, if it appears
that I think only of myself.
Forgive me, friends, for needing to do this
and don't scorn me, privacy, for choosing to do so in this way.
And lastly (at least for now),
my sincerest apology for the apologies...
that I have not yet made.
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Silent-No-More
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by shelby on
Monday, 25th June 2007 @ 04:11:29 PM AEST
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OMG,
such a emotive and emotional charged write,
honest thought you have placed here, deeply moving and so very personal yet touching and striking nerves as I read each word..... which in turn I shall reread this once more.
Moved to the point of tears while reading this hun
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by Dom on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 12:25:56 AM AEST
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Its lovely to read some new poetry from you!
This was quite simply outstanding, written masterfully. To be able to grasp such concepts as you express takes a great deal of self-awareness and consideration. This is the most all-encompassing piece of apology poetry that I have ever read.
I do intend to read the poem that inspired this, but I can't seem to get into the forums at the moment, so I'll just find it somewhere on the Internet.
Brilliant and brilliant some more!
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by Baronhawk on
Thursday, 28th June 2007 @ 04:37:34 PM AEST
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It is just as well that you are silent no more, for what you do voice are perhaps rather sublime and maybe more. I like this piece. Firstly for its honesty, its honest to goodness like expression that I for one has left behind hiding through the quagmire of my vocabulary. I like it, for its reminders for my own many transgression and the apologies I yet still have left to make. I know not what Wislawa would think nor say but speaking personally if my meager work, such as it is, were to inspire someone to a discourse and beauty such as this I might not really mind. As long as there are no real transgression of intellectual thought. What are ideas and inspirations anyway if they are not spread around like fertilizer to nourish and inspire many more inspirations and ideas to take root and grow. Anyhow, I like this piece a lot for its refreshing take on life and things. And now I have a lot of apologies to make, and not so strangely some even to myself for being such a blind old bat. Wish me luck. There is also a certain lady that I need to apologize to.
P.S. This is perhaps what I miss most about not being around YPDC as much as I used to. The inspiration and insight that I often get from the wonderful poetry and forum postings herein. Not all the time mind you but sometimes you do get those rare gems. |
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by Alex23 on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 12:57:43 PM AEST
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well, do you really need me to tell you how good this piece is?
Great great work. |
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th July 2007 @ 05:59:56 PM AEST
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Snemmy,
you write with a depth and intricacy
of thought that is simply staggering.
The honesty and declaration of self is inspiring.
This is,as ever,superbly written.
I needed to read this,it might just ease
my stubbornness,because everything that isn't
flesh and blood,it seems to me,owes me
an apology.
Time for some quiet thought and perhaps
the untethering of a few scapegoats.
Thank you,
Den |
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by freckle on
Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 08:24:25 AM AEST
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Ah Snem, Bravo! To have been away for so long and to be led, yes I believe led, to this prose, this day....what a treasure I did indeed find within.
*sigh*
I do so wish I had more time to wander within YPDC....
Hugs,
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 05:48:35 AM AEST
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I have to say after reading this I just could not bring myself to comment, not for days, even now there is something within me, some stubborness that refuses to allow me to let go. Intersting that....but I will say that after reading both pieces, I honestly like yours better. It is somehow more complete, more thourough....more sincere? than Wislawa's.
I have yet to complete pondering this. that is not a bad thing, so I will say thank you, thank you for the thought process. |
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Re: Sincerely, Me
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by evilcherry312 on
Monday, 10th December 2007 @ 10:43:22 AM AEST
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I
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this. |
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