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Mental Abyss
Contributed by
Poess
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Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 09:17:34 AM in AEST
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It's a long climb that I'm not sure I can make
with razor-sharp edges that I helped to create
this anger that lives deep in my sub-conscience
pushing me farther down as I try to get out of this
my persistent sadness is like a never ending thunderstorm
soaking this ragged cliff and making my fingers unable to perform
each clap of thunder is changed into laughter
not mine but of those who got up faster
mocking my incapable hands as I slide farther within
blood now cascading down the walls as I slowly give in
I close my eyes and leave it up to fate
release my tortured mind let go of what I hate
falling a million miles an hour I'm finally at peace
the wind wrapping my abused body in the softest of fleece
I will fall until the end of time
inside my troubled, troubled mind
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Poess
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2007-06-27 09:17:34]
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Re: Mental Abyss
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by NoSaint on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 09:36:32 AM AEST
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you described the fight to just make it through another day very well
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Re: Mental Abyss
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by unknown_utopia on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 10:03:03 AM AEST
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well done
good flow
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Re: Mental Abyss
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 12:34:42 PM AEST
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Great write, one that I can relate to all to well. Excellent conveyance of your feelings. BiPolar is no fun and it is a constant struggle, hang in there though....had a friend once who told me to look at it as a gift. We think about things, wonder about things.....our minds work at a 100 miles an hour, not everyone goes there you know. We do. We're strong and unique. Great write and thank you for sharing.
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Re: Mental Abyss
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 05:36:15 PM AEST
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You have taken the analogy of a 'climb' out of depression to new poetic heights, I could really understand what you were/are feeling through the powerful descriptions.
Its good that you are still hanging on and able to write about it, which is cathartic.
Take care,
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Re: Mental Abyss
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by deathdrop on
Saturday, 30th June 2007 @ 11:41:42 AM AEST
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god rhyme.
sad poem.
10/10
keep writing. it helps. |
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Re: Mental Abyss
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by myheartsvoice on
Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 12:18:11 AM AEST
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From what i've seen in your art work and just and in your personal strugle in life i'd say you'll be ok and are doing fine hang in there beautiful write.
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