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Untitled
Contributed by
Spell_Weaver
on
Wednesday, 4th July 2007 @ 02:40:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The child in a white dress
smoking cherry cigarettes
headed fast for the flat horizon.
A teenage couple holding hands
a world of things they don't understand
love, loss, and mostly hope.
Throw their lives to the wind
embracing such a precious sin
like cherry bombs blowing up in boxes.
A drop every now and then
licking up a salty end
wonder what red tears would be like.
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Spell_Weaver
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2007-07-04 14:40:10]
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Re: Untitled
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by a7x36 on
Wednesday, 4th July 2007 @ 04:19:29 PM AEST
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short and to the point, lot of very subtle near rhymes, didn't struggle to rhyme which is great to see
i'd call it "smoking cherry cigarettes" titleling a poem can be as easy as using a random line or basically just going with whatever pops into ur head |
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