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Peruvian Petals
Contributed by
ArkAngelGabriell
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Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 09:47:57 AM in AEST
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Peruvian Petals
Shadow of a doubt, forces my mind to hurt
A tiresome mind pushes me, nearly to burst
As the presence of destruction, appears to be weak
Nightmares make it very hard, i cant even speak
Evil consumes me now, my soul has been tainted
My spirit has spoken, blood-spilled, as if painted
Tears fall freely down my eyes, caressing my thighs
As the warmth of the rose petal, withers and dies
I feel empty now, sadness surrounds my cause
For the pain and suffering of life, makes my heart pause
Dropping to my knees, sadly, embracing the air
Looking at my queen, with empty eyes, a tearful stare
Embrace my love, and call forth, the diety of pain
For the love that once we had, has since long been slain
Thrust this dagger in this hole, that once held a heart
Which marks the end of us, there's no more trust, forcing us apart
Columbian Rose, my queen, take with you my burden
The burden of a thousand tear drops, time tends to be frozen
What life is that to bare, a life to care, for one who does doubt
For the eternal flame of love for me, begins to fizzle out
Seek redemption for, the pain you cause, enflaming my soul
Rainy day to night, heart full of spite, or maybe bullet holes
So come forth to me, with eyes of envy, and rescue my pain
Cause a life not yours, is a life forlorn, id rather go insane
Mi amor, mi todo, te amo cant you see
For me and you, like heaven and earth, were just meant to be
I wish i could show you, or perhaps hold you, and tell you, Nathalie
That im prepared, to be by you, nothing less than an eternity...
~Crumity Roy~
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by xXdeadXpoetXx on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 11:46:23 AM AEST
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| amazing poem! great write! if i had 3 thumbs, i would put them all up. equisite detail!! |
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by shelby on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 12:11:50 PM AEST
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First of all I would like to extend a welcome to YPDC.
This poem is beautiful and flowing touched with hints of sadness. The flow and images you create are both wonderful.
Also....... Most times I dont comment if Im asked to just so you know.
When you are new here it is wise to extend yourself and not only write your beautiful poetry but also read and comment on others work.
Hope to see you around for a long time to come
~Michelle~ |
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 12:55:19 PM AEST
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| I agree with Michelle this is a great write with a hint of sadness .good job |
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 01:18:17 PM AEST
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this is fabulous writing from title to end, wonderful lay out and flow, heartfelt beautiful,
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by emystar on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 01:52:30 PM AEST
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Thanks shelby,
I was gonna touch on that subject but you did it for me.
This is a, nexceptional write, very plkeasing to read.
Welcome to our global family her.
The rules are that you comment on at least three poems to one post.
I voleeter here to help Mick with the load that our glabal family here is very importent.
Again welcome and once you've read one of mine and left your thoughts I'll read-n-comment yours.
Awesome writing, friend.
Huggs, smiles,
emy
Sometimes I'm so busy that I don't get to spend as much time commenting even with those that has supported me with comments over many years but they know I'm here and they understand.
Mick is the greatest Webmaster on the web.
Welcome.
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 7th July 2007 @ 03:08:04 AM AEST
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wow this is simply very deep and passionate.. great job here.. enchanting!!
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Re: Peruvian Petals
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by yackerz85 on
Saturday, 7th July 2007 @ 08:57:35 AM AEST
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| I have to say that this is a spectacular piece of work. Your rhythm and rhyme are smooth and flowing and all your descriptions create livid images. The gloomy beginning but hopeful ending suggests some resolve to the issue. Despite the many dark sad stanzas, I still consider this as a love poem. Perhaps even greater than a standard love poem because despite these problems despite these tendencies towards giving up, love and devotion prevails. |
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