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Lighting up the s k y
Contributed by
Psychoscissors
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Wednesday, 11th July 2007 @ 02:34:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Warm legs pulled under myself,
the heat of thighs lit up the sky,
I never expected this sunrise,
So warm
born from flesh and bone,
keeping toes curled in cold,
Keeping brows relaxed in salty waves,
I slipped my legs under the covers,
turned over suddenly and right before the sun,
I cried butterflies alone,
who spun back into heated lungs,
time swam in salty waves,
Burning up the kindled sky,
turning back the clock to bodies pressed,
So warm
I cried dreary dark and pulled under myself
the sudden heat of thighs lighting up the sky.
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Re: Lighting up the s k y
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by jenniferstein2006 on
Wednesday, 11th July 2007 @ 03:16:44 PM AEST
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Re: Lighting up the s k y
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 11th July 2007 @ 03:16:56 PM AEST
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very nicely done,
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Re: Lighting up the s k y
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 12th July 2007 @ 12:51:14 AM AEST
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a very well written poem here.. I liked the flow and the use of wording.. great job
Rock on,
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Re: Lighting up the s k y
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 12th July 2007 @ 01:13:32 PM AEST
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I cried butterflies alone
Fabulous line!!!!!!!! That one line definitely made the poem for me. Not to dismiss the rest of the write entirely - but it almost felt, to me I mean, that it wouldn't matter what you put around that line... it is, in and of itself, fabulous enough to merit kudos.
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