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Fading Away
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Saturday, 1st March 2003 @ 11:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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The blood pours down my arms With reckless abandon (forming a pool around my feet) I crash to my knees My arms held out in front Like Jesus showing his wounds To his disciples, my cause is my own Even though the 'strong' man has fallen Inside I'm weak and pitiful
My eyes stare forward like there's something there Something that can heal my pain Something that can stop the bleeding, But there's no one, just me, alone I can't even help myself
The blood is thicker now I stare at it stupidly Panic far from me, Bliss overtaking my thoughts This famine of joy Eats away at my shattered soul Distressed, distraught, disillusioned Life hanging by a thread I walk around numb, unfeeling, But inside the agony eats away at me Like cancer tearing at my body
I'm fading away, I'm fading away I moan a barely audible cry for help Forgetting no one can hear, No one will come to my aid Forgetting... no one gives a ***** Can't distinguish the blood From the tears anymore I shake my head to clear the cobwebs, But they remain My arms are red and angry I cut to deep, went to far I won't have to worry about the scars
Soon I will be forgotten A fading picture in your memory book Your memory book of lies I will be the blot And I'll be forgotten The only mar in your happy little lives Already in your memory I can see I'm beginning to fade...
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
... [
2003-03-01 23:00:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by ktbugg on
Saturday, 1st March 2003 @ 11:36:10 PM AEST (User
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hey, nice job... i don't really know much about suicide but you're an amazing writer... keep it up!! :) |
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by nightrider on
Saturday, 1st March 2003 @ 11:37:00 PM AEST (User
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wow... this is amazing, as always... you have such a way with words, it just astonishes me that you could write what i feel... keep writing!! |
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by riverofwords on
Sunday, 2nd March 2003 @ 01:49:39 AM AEST (User
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amazing treatmnet of such a difficult subject
keep on writing
peace be your journey
terry
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by wyrd_faerie on
Sunday, 2nd March 2003 @ 03:06:40 PM AEST (User
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this is absolutely stunning...beautiful... |
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by tawakwan on
Sunday, 2nd March 2003 @ 03:39:45 PM AEST (User
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it's too long.that doesn't mean it's bad.i just feel that it could of been said with less detail,and more direct hard hitting formulation |
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by LadyDama on
Friday, 7th March 2003 @ 04:23:54 PM AEST (User
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awesome... truly excellent... especially the ending... reminds me of a poem i wrote called the downfall... except that was about a drug overdose, instead of cutting too deep... you do have much talent... beautifully sad and harsh poetry... blessings... |
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Re: Fading Away
(User Rating: 1 ) by karoody on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 12:03:11 PM AEST (User
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joel, don't change a thing about you or your work. you are such a kind person. it must be so hard to watch these people feel all this pain. thanx for sharing this. you will never fade.
your friend,
kara |
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