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~King Jay Uly Zar~
Contributed by
misfitme
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Saturday, 14th July 2007 @ 02:53:14 PM in AEST
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~revised~
After a thousand times~
across the sky has come
The silver path of Moon~
in turn with gold of Sun...
Then will one foretold of~
be gifted unto earth
The first male child~
by Destiny given birth...
This only ever son~
to be fathered by the stars
Is, 'he' the prophets name~
the King Jay Uly Zar...
Discovered will he be~
by one down near the river
Who Onnibah is called~
& baby just delivered...
Twin will he be claimed~
to her own new born child
A simple man fashioned~
before a King he is styled...
So after a thousand trips~
made by Moon & Sun
He was found & fostered~
by one whose heart he'd won...
A deep & abiding love~
they shared with one another
Though same could not be said~
of Uly & his, " brother "...
Profound was Ulys need~
to understand this twin
To free him from the hate~
which ate at him within...
To be continued...
~BIGLOVEMUCHPEACE~
~me~
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Re: ~King Jay Uly Zar~
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 15th July 2007 @ 12:26:19 AM AEST
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The beginnings of a fine story. I hope Uly never gives up on his brother...and one day he will "free him from the hate~" Sometimes the hate we feel, is really only pain from somewhere else....though it is so unhealthy....I know. Great write poetsis...looking forward to the rest of the story.
Peace, love and hugs,
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Re: ~King Jay Uly Zar~
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 15th July 2007 @ 12:15:36 PM AEST
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This is gloriously beautiful and your being you again, and i'll be at the continuance, you
can count on it. Lovely Write Kerry . . .
Ben |
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Re: ~King Jay Uly Zar~
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by FRANCO on
Sunday, 15th July 2007 @ 02:54:55 PM AEST
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Hard to wait, to know what's next....
What can I say...waoooo...and waooooo...again.
You have surely started this story with a big bang.
FRANCO.
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Re: ~King Jay Uly Zar~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th July 2007 @ 01:39:10 PM AEST
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cleverly written my dear poetsis! There was a very nice flow to this and
the rhyming was sensational. I LOVE historical writes (especially ancient
history).... and wow! This has me truly intrigued ~
you have an inspirational quality of writing that is to die for hun!! I love this.
Can't wait for the continuation!
peace, love and hugs
~Breezy |
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