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Winter's Thaw
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 03:47:05 AM in AEST
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Would you please come
and take me away?
I feel like I cannot stand
to breathe here...
another damn day.
I'm growing restless
and feeling so unkind.
This last trauma
has left me burned...battered,
my eyes were so blind.
I want to feel again...
an honest lover's breath.
Whisper out my name...please
Fall in love all over
let it survive even death.
Screaming so loud to you
my throat has grown raw
This voice hardly audible
tears drowning me like...
ice floes from the winter's thaw.
7-17-07
Laura Howell Horner
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 06:05:44 AM AEST
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great poem! i loved the flow and especially liked
This last trauma
has left me burned...battered,
my eyes were so blind.
those three lines stood out the most to me. keep writing!
best,
Imperia
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 06:37:05 AM AEST
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wow laurabean this is just simply beautiful.. I love the flow and wonderful imagery here.. beauitiful job
Rock on,
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by myheartsvoice on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 07:33:34 AM AEST
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Your sadness is reverberating in my heart,
it seem's to be echoing out of control once
again, a powerful and simple peice you have
pened here, it whispers with an unsupecting roar and roars with a long over due scream.
((((peace2u my sister))))
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by MisfitMe on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 11:03:21 AM AEST
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I'll add my own screams to help you be heard & I'll use this brave proclamation of your needs...
"I want to feel again...
an honest lover's breath.
Whisper out my name...please
Fall in love all over
let it survive even death."~you
I have the best of intentions w/ my vibes & mojo, but, for all the world, in this moment...I'd trade in all my good intention for the ability to hold you tight in physical reality...'cause, I loves ya', poetsis & I'm so extemely sorry for your pain...
BigLoveMuchPeace
~kerrylynne
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 02:10:02 PM AEST
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Awwww Laura hugs sis.
I am here for sis send me a Pm if you want to talk.
love ya
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by shelby on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 02:31:15 PM AEST
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teary eyed....
ok sis whats up tonight?? I know what up but is there more?? Talk to me.
I wish this would go away and you find that soft spot full of love and truth, respect ..... and the divine white light to protect you and warm the winters thaw
huge hugs
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Dom on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 06:52:07 PM AEST
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You've captured a world of pain and sorrow in just 20 short lines, the simplicity of which only enhances the emotion.
It is heartwrenching to read your open cries and I can only say that I am very sorry you are going through such pain.
Sending big hugs,
Dom |
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Crow on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 11:12:16 PM AEST
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Laura...so filled with pain. but a beautiful write.
I wish you peace my friend...Vincent |
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd July 2007 @ 07:45:25 AM AEST
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Oh laura, hun. Damn I hate that your heart is going through this.
Something is terribly terribly wrong with that. :(
It's weird; somehow the picture seems so beautiful, though I
know if I were to set my foot inside that water, I would get a very
cold shock into reality! Life/love can be like that sometimes. On the
outside everything seems so beautiful and gentle. Then bam! We
stick our feet in and get a shock. I'm sorry you are still suffering
the aftermath of your "shock". Sis, it will get better .. I know somedays
it looks like the pain and torture will NEVER end. It will.
I wish and pray for you to be granted the wisdom and strength to make
the impossible decisions that you are being faced with. You are an
inspiration, my sweet friend. Always.
Peace, strength and love to you, sweet poet,
~MG |
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd July 2007 @ 06:10:29 PM AEST
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| Broken hearts do mend it takes time and a strong will. Then another love this time perhaps the right one for you Laura. I wish it with all my heart. bern |
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Re: Winter's Thaw
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by Whisper on
Tuesday, 31st July 2007 @ 06:52:32 PM AEST
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Thank you for sharing this write.
Whisper |
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