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~ Platonic Desires ~
Contributed by
Davinah
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Friday, 27th July 2007 @ 05:09:46 PM in AEST
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A divorcee on the cutting edge of profanity
Your cocaine really doesn't do it for me
There are already too many voices in my head
fighting over that last word
You crept from the shadows, now you're blocking my view
and there's no way I could see around you
always in my face and always on my back
should have left you where you found me
and when the phone rings late at night
I always think it might be you who got hold of me
and of my unlisted number
But I can never be your heroin
Can we stick to platonic, please don't open up
I don't want to know your heart's disease
Give me some beer and popcorn and you'll shut up
Translated phrases, chacun son got
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Davinah
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2007-07-27 17:09:46]
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Re: ~ Platonic Desires ~
(User Rating: 1 )
by reprobate on
Saturday, 28th July 2007 @ 07:29:33 AM AEST
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you've got a lot of good thoughts/lines within this piece. the only suggestion i can make is you may desire to refine it so the idea(s) is(are) a bit more fluid, though. however, i did enjoy reading it.
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