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Bless the Night
Contributed by
AnenaLynne
on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 12:13:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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She blessed the night that shielded her,
From her captors piercing glares.
Thanked the heavens for the darkness,
That blocked their repulsive stares.
They were circled all around her,
And they were slowly closing in.
They intended to show no mercy,
As they punished her for her sins.
As they screamed out accusations,
Her heart began to pound.
And individual cries blended together,
And formed one loud, chaotic sound.
But the stirrings of fear that had gripped her,
Were steadily flowing away.
And in the darkness she renewed her courage.
And it gave her strength to face another day.
They expected her spirit to falter,
And for her body to buckle from pain.
But instead she looked up smiling,
With a face devoid of shame.
And silence befell the congregation,
As numb understanding flowed through their veins.
Was this different young girl the cause of their problems?
Or were their own simple prejudices to blame?
Then they turned their faces toward her.
The hatred gone out of their eyes.
And they wondered how this calm, unnatural beauty,
Without speaking had changed their lives.
And in the darkness she walked out of their presence.
Leaving ignorance in ashes in her wake.
And once again blessed the night that still shielded her.
And gave wisdom to light the paths she would take.
Copyright ©
AnenaLynne
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2007-07-30 12:13:43]
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Re: Bless the Night
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 02:36:54 PM AEST
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| you had some nice rhyming going on. it was also nice that the ending referred back to the beginning with basically the same line. the poem flowed smoothly while i was reading it, until after the line ending in veins. quite the disappointment to have such a smooth flowing poem get disrupted so close to the end. of course, artistically the break in smoothness can bring more attention towards the end, more to what is said then how it is said. |
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Re: Bless the Night
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by InfinitePoet on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 06:05:37 PM AEST
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| JUST PLAIN FRIGGIN EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KEEP UP THE GREAT WRITING!! PepperMint Ki$$e$ |
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Re: Bless the Night
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by anangel_1593 on
Tuesday, 31st July 2007 @ 03:22:14 AM AEST
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I really liked this, but i have to agree that the ending was a bit shaky but the choice of words was quite well done
Keep it up
Lotsa love
*ana* |
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Re: Bless the Night
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by love_lost on
Sunday, 23rd September 2007 @ 12:40:35 PM AEST
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| this reminds me so much of a past experience of mine...really powerful poem |
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