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Afraid of Failure
Contributed by
InfinitePoet
on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 06:02:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Afraid of FAilure
Discover hidden agenda's
within the fasade of A
"Loyal Friendship"....
Deter the fatal pact
that the Evil Fence sitter
has in mind
Search the depth of
your being for
A purpose & A
Vision
Envision A fate as
dark& as undesirable as
your worst nightmares
YOU CONTROL
YOUR
~DESTINY~
choose who sets your
Spirit free
AND
DOn't loose sight of
REALITY,
Duality is Apart of ME
WHo else would I be?
Not complete without
LOYALTY
Family seem to be
Clowning me & doubting me
If only they could
sail my sea
Then would I seem
so Doomed to be
A loser
so cowardly &
Overly Protective,
Hard headed?
Maybe
But I look straight into
Reality
and recognize
how my actions will
determine
if my future has already
become one
undeniable
Fatality
or will I remain
A true
FAILURE
with A
Street Level MENTALITY??...................
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InfinitePoet
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Re: Afraid of Failure
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by PoeticHybrid on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 11:01:20 PM AEST
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Over all I liked it. Only suggestion I have would be to break apart the last stanza at
"Hard headed?
Maybe
But I look straight into..." |
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Re: Afraid of Failure
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 11:06:56 PM AEST
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| Look ahead and get your face out of the sand the poem says that you are a defeatist. Write about the good things that have happened to you over your life. I wish you well bern. |
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Re: Afraid of Failure
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by purplestary on
Tuesday, 31st July 2007 @ 02:23:34 AM AEST
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this was a pretty nice write..i enjoyed it..it had a fairly decent flow....i particularly liked the end ..."...or will i remain a true FAILURE with a street level MENTALITY??.."
the beginning was a little choppy..wasn't sure what to think..till i got further in..but...it was still nice. |
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Re: Afraid of Failure
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by CoalMinersWife on
Tuesday, 31st July 2007 @ 09:08:53 AM AEST
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| Good poem liked it especialy towards the end Keep up the good work! |
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Re: Afraid of Failure
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th June 2008 @ 07:19:47 AM AEST
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| Loved it. Genius. I don't usually like that many poems I am very selective and picky. Very good. I am very admirable of you. Keep it up. |
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