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I'm coming with you!
Contributed by
fadingaway
on
Monday, 6th August 2007 @ 08:33:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I'm so alone,
Don't leave me, It's so cold!
Im drowning in the blackness,
Dreaming of the way,
That it used to be,
Don't leave me alone, It's so cold!
I'm coming with you,
With scars on my wrists,
I beg you!!
Let this be that last night that I'm crying like this!
You're parents tell me "EVERYTHING IS YOUR FAULT!!!!"
Dispite all the lies that there making,
This world was ours for the taking,
I wish my love would be enough,
I wish I could turn my tears to roses,
But all I hear is whispers in the dark,
Your touch used to give me so much hope,
Don't leave me alone, It's so cold!
I'm so sick of everyone saying,
You'll be ok,
I didn't even get to say goodbye
Don't leave me alone, It's so cold!
I'm coming with you,
With scars on my wrists,
I beg you!!
Let this be that last night that I'm crying like this!
Im falling in the blackness,
Dreaming of the way,
That it used to be,
Now my tears have turned to crimson,
Wishing that they could be roses,
NO!! Don't leave me alone,
You're to young to be lost,
I'll be the one that's gonna find you,
Our love will be the fire,
I'm coming with you,
We'll never be alone,
Our love is burning,
We'll never be alone,
Upon the bed of crimson roses,
I couldn't leave you alone, It's so cold,
We're falling in the blackness,
Leaving behind our memory,
Hear our wispers in the dark!
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fadingaway
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2007-08-06 08:33:32]
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Re: I'm coming with you!
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by wordsy on
Monday, 6th August 2007 @ 12:32:47 PM AEST
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I feel a lot of angst here, which is a good place to place it. No better way to show what lies with in.
The written word knows no bias nor chooses side.
I like the way you portray yourself as both victim and saviour.
nicely done.
as always,
wordsy. |
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Re: I'm coming with you!
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by emystar on
Monday, 6th August 2007 @ 12:49:11 PM AEST
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Well I'd say you definently busted out of your block with this very powerfull, heart wrenched Write.
Sad but very freeing.
Awesome!
huggs,
emy |
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Re: I'm coming with you!
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th August 2007 @ 11:07:34 PM AEST
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Good grief! This was damn emotional!
There is a confusion herein that is disquieting. Almost an ambiguity of sorts.
Like saying, this is what it is, but it could be different, sort of thing.
I absolutely LOVE this line,
"I wish I could turn my tears to roses"
Damn. Now that is finely poetic! There is a darkness that floats
inside these words ... but also a tiny comfort. A grasping of
"holding on forever".
Great post.
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Re: I'm coming with you!
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 7th August 2007 @ 02:52:00 AM AEST
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I love this poem.. its very dark and tragic.. very powerful and expressive.. this is a very well done poem.. awesome job
rock on,
vampyress jenni |
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Re: I'm coming with you!
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by endlesspath on
Tuesday, 7th August 2007 @ 07:19:39 AM AEST
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alot of convection in this write, and some power in certain lines. agreed with the tears and roses. its dark, sad and very powerful. i hope you gain the love you want with this write.
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