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Lifetime Wasted
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 06:06:53 AM in AEST
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Much on my shoulders
much on my mind
I desperately searched for what peace I could find
A life lived in turmoil
a life lived in fear
I cried out for answers but no one could hear
Alone in my troubles
alone in my bed
I listened to devils that screamed in my head
They spoke with a vengeance
They spoke in one voice
A unified chorus that left me no choice
I turned to the bottle
I turned to the weed
I took foolish chances that made my soul bleed
I learned of deception
I learned how to lie
I thought I was living but started to die
The years ran together
The years came and went
All out of excuses for how they were spent
No hope for tomorrow
No hope for today
I watched in stunned silence as life slipped away....
Oh how will it finish,
Oh how will it end,
I've run out of people,
and Gods to offend
L. Carling c2007
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by jerseysue on
Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 06:37:16 AM AEST
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| I can feel the despair in this write, so sad and soulful, I can truly relate to this. Sue x |
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 10:29:15 AM AEST
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Ok my king of roses,
this is sad man damn sad. Beautiful but sad.
I felt the sadness and regret in this write.
You are not alone..... you know where I am!
We have all lived and done things we regret.
Today is a new day my friend, look for an adventure...... easier said than done at times but there is a new adventure around each corner......
Im around if you want to talk..... My site and myspace account are posted in my profile.
raindancermyst is still on yahoo.
Take care you
I shall toss the rose petals your way this time
Michelle |
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 05:11:03 PM AEST
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I'm always impressed by how well you've managed to cut the clutter of a poem, saying just what needs to be said... and employing rhyme so masterfully at the same time. This packs a punch, on the emotional level, but its technical skill is worthy of a bit of adulation as well.
A tall frosty pint for this man. Sláinte!
Andrew |
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 06:37:35 PM AEST
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I understand the pain you feel in regrets of the past, but the only way for that to heal is to move forwards. It can be such a difficult move to make, but simply acknowledging the pain and mistakes can make it easier.
Great write, it packs a huge emotional punch.
Take care,
Dom |
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by endlesspath on
Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 11:08:54 PM AEST
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well make what time that has been wasted and turn around. you can not live in the past, it has to be in the present. learn from the mistakes you did and go forward. i could feel alot of pain and despair with this. i can realate...
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 26th August 2007 @ 12:39:02 PM AEST
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brilliantly heartfelt and honest, not sappy; but raw emotion with acceptance, by far one of your best, i love the way you laid this one out, ive read it over and over and am torn between sending you a big hug or a slap on the back for the excellent quality, lol, you know i wish you happiness always, yet the mood that brought this poem to light is so extraordinary, i hope there are a few more like this brewing in there:)
love n' hugs nessa
roses! roses! daisys! and roses!
p.s. your life is not wasted but a gift of your talent |
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Re: Lifetime Wasted
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by ever1der on
Wednesday, 17th October 2007 @ 01:19:38 PM AEST
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| (((((((raker)))))) you're poetry is a gift to all of us that get to read it so don't ever think your life is a waste. You are a muse to many .... never stop a musing us! |
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