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Death in the coldest north...
Contributed by
zenith66
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Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 06:05:47 AM in AEST
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Deep and slow the feeling flows,
Im half asleep with drifting snows,
The pearly luminescent night,
Swooning softly in and out of sight,
As far from love as I will ever be,
Its pallid bleakness so profound it comforts me,
My heavy lids sink slowly into somnolent rest
The starkest night wears flawless jewels upon her vest,
Forgotten lands of lonely crystalline tundra,
Imbue the softest sleep upon my soul, its full of dying thunder,
My dreams here fill with zigzagged flakes of patchy snow,
Unearthly solace descends from ghostly heights Id never cared to know,
Sleeps embrace is frosty here,
An ashen face is filled with frozen tears,
No beads of sweat cling to its brow
From daily deeds unceasing , and a sleepy soul knows rest now.
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Re: Death in the coldest north...
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by Adreana on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 07:15:16 AM AEST
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This DID flow beautifully. The imagery was fantastic. It was so calm and sad. "From daily dees unceasing, and a sleepy soul knows no rest" reminds me of the things I have been writing lately. We must endure, eh? Thanks for being inspired....
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Re: Death in the coldest north...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 10:07:32 AM AEST
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Wow. The title is reminiscent of Robert W. Service and very intriguing ...
Love the imagery here, zenith. It sets the mind in all sorts of
imaginings. The emotion bleeding from your words is filled with
a melancholy that is tremendously gripping. Excellent word usage,
my friend. I especially loved the last stanza. Very engrossing ...
~Breezy
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Re: Death in the coldest north...
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 11:02:44 AM AEST
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Mmmmm loved the feel and flow of this. The imagery which you conjured up in my mind's eye was beautiful....maybe I'm just so thirsty for cooler weather. So many lines I love....
"The starkest night wears flawless jewels upon her vest,"
The piece had a bit of sadness to it, but the wording was just awesomely beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
Peace,
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Re: Death in the coldest north...
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by endlesspath on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 11:58:05 AM AEST
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what a moving title
what a flowing piece
it captured all what was felt and being felt
your words flow and give images to the reader who can sit and wonder
ponder
and really think more and more
give too many felt thoughts
i can relate
loved the post
endless |
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