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Insomnia
Contributed by
wordsy
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Friday, 31st August 2007 @ 10:10:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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I lie awake staring
eyes wide and glaring
sleep is not it seems my friend
It's four in the morning
a passing night I'm mourning
as the sun does creep around again
I've watched the break of dawn
with the dew up on the lawn
as the birds they do begin to sing
And I've felt upon my face
the mornings' warming grace
as tomorrow, now today comes again
I've tried and I've tried
until I did decide
that sleep has slipped my grasp once more
And though I can't deny
all those times that I did cry
when the suns' beaten path crossed my door
But all of my tears
cannot wash away the fears
that gather with the setting of each days sun
And as night it closes in
my prayers they do begin
that slumber would fill my waking void
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2007-08-31 22:10:06]
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Re: Insomnia
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st August 2007 @ 11:39:14 PM AEST
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I like this a lot! It has a great rhythmic flow to it.
However, you need to watch the "did"s and "do"s, they are termed fillers in poetry. No offense, I did it for years! common mistake. But keep writing! I like your style. |
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Re: Insomnia
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by DesolantDreamer on
Saturday, 1st September 2007 @ 06:19:26 AM AEST
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| wonderful poem. it has a very good flow and rythem. I like the rhyme scheme and such. Very nicely done. |
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