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to the wind
Contributed by
forgotten_poet
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Saturday, 15th September 2007 @ 07:01:21 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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Wind
Always moaning
Mourning
What is that you have lost?
A lover perhaps?
Is it for a friend you are crying?
Or maybe you are slowly dying
Tell me why
Wind
So that I may do some weeping for you
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Re: to the wind
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by Moonshine on
Saturday, 15th September 2007 @ 11:53:55 AM AEST
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| Well I noticed that the lines ending with crying and dying rhyme. If it was intentional, maybe you should try working on a pattern of rhyming scheme to make the work flow a little better. I really enjoy nature poetry, and I like your idea of giving the wind the human emotion of sadness. Nice work. |
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Re: to the wind
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by brew on
Tuesday, 23rd October 2007 @ 11:11:05 AM AEST
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Winds blowing for one who did, or didnt and will? hm
Winds can take and make all things sirl with life.
Different write
Liked it alot
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