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Winged
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Friday, 5th October 2007 @ 05:25:46 PM in AEST
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Its time.
Theres no turning back once
youve looked yourself in the eye.
Unspoken bravery, counts.
A regurgitated universe
is still a universe, after all
and the kitchen sink it fell in,
that assembly hall for lost souls,
becomes the reason why.
Bite the damn sky.
It aint gonna bite back.
Trust me.
Butterflies are only wicked
if you look at them
the wrong way.
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Silent-No-More
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2007-10-05 17:25:46]
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Re: Winged
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th October 2007 @ 02:19:34 AM AEST
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i am thinking butterflies are not all that can get wicked if looked at wrong. i have known a few people like that. but i don't think that is what you mean. suddenly i am imagining a swarm of kamakazzie attack butterflies that do not like being looked at cross eyed.
on a more serious note "becomes be the reason why" you seem to write deliberately, i am questioning the word "be", i guess you have reason for it, but i just don't get it.
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Re: Winged
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th October 2007 @ 04:34:17 AM AEST
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Butterflies, huh? Snemmy, ain't none wickeder than the old hummin'birds. Ya gotta duck if ya git in their way!!!!!!
I smiled reading 'n' enjoyin' this here piece o', as always, masterful work. Always can count on ya fer good 'n' lotsa times in-depth reads. Kudos.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Winged
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 6th October 2007 @ 01:18:02 PM AEST
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'Unspoken bravery, counts'
I'm reciting that in my head over and over again now, it's the part of the poem that stands out the most for me (although I couldn't help but remember a slight fear of ladybugs I had back in the day when you got to talking about butterflies).
I also loved the motivational tone of the speaker, reminiscent of a parent teaching their child to ride a bike for the first time. For that reason the whole write was nostalgic for me, and nostalgia is always wonderful to read. Nice post : ) |
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Re: Winged
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th October 2007 @ 10:26:05 PM AEST
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" that assembly hall for lost souls" i love this
line awesome had to pull my self away from it so as to read the rest of the poem with out being distracted by it. I always know i'm gonna like what you write this is no exception.
Your one of the better one's on here . . .
Ben
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Re: Winged
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th October 2007 @ 12:08:40 AM AEST
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Ah Snems,how apt,I've just bitten the sky.
It didn't bite back but it left one awful taste in my mouth.
Butterflies should be looked at under the microscope,they wouldn't seem so appealing.
This hit me where I am at the moment.
I thought it was tremendous,as always,thanks
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Re: Winged
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by Dom on
Sunday, 7th October 2007 @ 11:55:05 PM AEST
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Snemmy it is impossible not to love your poems when you combine the inspirational with a wonderful mix of images, from kitchen sinks and butterflies to regurgitated universes! And the brilliant thing is, of course, that it all works and the whole mix of slightly absurd images tones down the inspirational (which can become over-sweet from other writers) to create a poem that pierces the heart with its truth.
Loved it!
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Re: Winged
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 11th October 2007 @ 12:11:18 AM AEST
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Yeah Snemmers, sister you hit it with this one. Damn. The brevity, the sharpness....ooooohhhh I loved this. It's been hard of late, gaining inspiration, this helps. This truly gives me the feeling of such empowerment. I feel like I just recently found myself again, and every bit of encouragement feels delightful. Thank you for sharing.
Much peace, love and hugs,
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Re: Winged
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by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 15th October 2007 @ 04:40:15 PM AEST
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Oh. My goodness.
This doesn't bowl me over or hit me like a ton of bricks or anything that visual. But at the same time, it's . . . well. It's loud, inside my head.
Y'know?
It's incredible. Y'know that, too?
as always,
Nora, a little bit shaken off her foundations by your poem. Again and again. |
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Re: Winged
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by needledancing on
Tuesday, 30th October 2007 @ 12:16:05 AM AEST
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| What an incredible assembly of pictures and words and meaning all in one jolt of artistic expression can this be? Just brilliant brain power I guess. Loved this piece. Esp the very last whack of wisdom! |
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