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Tongue Tide
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Friday, 12th October 2007 @ 04:13:49 PM in AEST
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Tongue Tide
Words now surge,
Crash and merge
Against clenched teeth.
Receding, then
They pool again
Somewhere underneath.
Mood is the moon
Affecting tune
As the skookumchuck,
This raging river,
Dances and shivers
Through the mud and muck.
They ebb and flow
As currents grow.
Emotion is a hurricane.
Winds will scream
And whip the stream.
Dam breaks from weight of rain.
Common sense is
Trapped in suspense
Within the undertow.
When floods subside
And storm has died
Waves of healing then, bestow.
~ Nazmythian ~
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 12th October 2007 @ 11:49:42 PM AEST
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Damn, this was a good read, fast flowing like that raging river you describe. I really love your ending stanza....wonderful words. Great write, Naz.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 13th October 2007 @ 01:47:06 AM AEST
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Naz ,
I really enjoyed this poem, it was very active and lively. Also, I thought the rhyming pattern was unique and interesting. I loved the metaphore using the rushing ebb and flow of rushing water...and when the storm subsides "waves of healing bestow" Also, a lot of creative imagery.
Well done my friend,
Terry/Will |
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by Adreana on
Saturday, 13th October 2007 @ 02:18:44 AM AEST
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Wowzers. It's, like, making my brain tingle!! Awesome use of language. I like your flow. Keep it up, yo!
~Adreana |
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by Spike on
Saturday, 13th October 2007 @ 03:33:14 AM AEST
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Naz, a terrific naturalistic metaphor for the behaviours, feelings and actions that roll and pitch within us. Top read, my friend, inspired.
Spike |
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by needledancing on
Saturday, 13th October 2007 @ 02:33:38 PM AEST
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| Truly a wonderful write....right from Tongue Tide..play on words to the ending waves of the healing tides. The flow of life being so much in balance with the flow of natures force is done to perfection in your work. Magnificent piece. |
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 24th October 2007 @ 04:53:22 PM AEST
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And very creative you are.
Very true words.
Great work.
Big huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Tongue Tide
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 14th November 2007 @ 02:17:58 PM AEST
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Now that was a strong piece, with a good flow! Strong, yet full of grace. It seems almost careless, as if it took no sweat to write, but then it seems so well done, that I rethink the first thought. Well done.
Take care, David |
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