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once again
Contributed by
JohnYamrus
on
Wednesday, 7th November 2007 @ 02:01:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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once again
it seems
ive allowed myself to become
the devil incarnate.
i always pictured myself
as a nice guy,
possibly even somewhat intelligent,
but, every now and then
i display a tendency toward
stupidity.
it showed itself again
the other day.
there i was,
minding my own business,
when a representative
from one of those
online poetry sites
approached me
and asked if id
be able to
help them out.
itll be fun she said,
well even
pay you nicely for it.
all youll have to do is go online
every now and then
and read some poems
our people have posted,
then make some comments.
all were looking for
is the truth. honest opinions.
dont hold anything back,
just tell them
exactly what you think of their work.
ill put the check in the mail today.
come on
how soon can you start?
it lasted four days.
im now banned from that site
and i think
its even been recommended
that genteel society
avoid me at all costs.
it started out
innocently enough
and i honestly tried
to make it work
giving faint praise
whenever i could
and silence whenever
i was backed into a corner
by something particularly awful.
it wasnt even
the horror of the poetry
that made me snap.
it was the members themselves
the poets
praising one another back and forth,
saying nice things
only to get the same nice things
said about their own
mindless crap.
there! see! its
starting again!
im starting to go off!
then, the other night,
there it was i never thought
id be the one who actually discovered it
but there it was
the worst poem ever written.
what made me nuts about it
wasnt the dactyls and iambs
and overall stink of it
it was the fact
that there were
15 comments posted
each and every one
ending with well done! and great!
and keep up the good work.
thats when i snapped.
i figured
since im the hired gun,
the guy being paid
to tell the truth,
the one brought in
to clean up Dodge,
it was my duty
and well-paid responsibility
to get in and set the record straight.
im told by those who read it
that it was a gloriously insane rant
a thing of beauty
that, among other things,
i threatened (twice)
to poke my eyes out with a stick
if i had to endure
stuff like that again.
the worst part of it all
was this poor persons friends
lying to her
again and again.
i just couldnt take it.
so, here i sit,
locked out.
hated.
banned.
a cloven-footed beast.
right now
im lying by the pool
on an impossibly sunny day.
ive got my notebook,
a pen
and a glass of lemonade.
Kathy opens the back door
and says: the mail just came.
theres a check for you.
just put it on the counter.
ill get to it later.
im tired.
lets go
for a
swim.
Copyright ©
JohnYamrus
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2007-11-07 02:01:44]
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Re: once again
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by gribbs on
Wednesday, 7th November 2007 @ 02:13:05 AM AEST
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| spoken like a true human being |
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Re: once again
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 7th November 2007 @ 03:34:03 AM AEST
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this is very expressive and very honest.. I am not sure to whom you are referring exactly.. but this is very well written.
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: once again
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by thecyanidesun on
Wednesday, 7th November 2007 @ 03:43:16 AM AEST
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| very interesting and it caught my attention, very honest and real like it should be. Nicely done. |
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Re: once again
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 7th November 2007 @ 10:11:49 AM AEST
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Well shoot fire. I guess I can't say..."Well done"..."Great"..."Keep up the good work". *smiles* the last one sounds really cheesy doesn't it? I do like the write you've penned here...a little sarcastic in feel, and a little humor thrown in, at least it made me smile. I can say that I do try to say positive things to folks. If I read something and it's crap, well then I usually don't comment. Sometimes though, I have to respond if the subject matter, or write is just goofy. I hate to judge other people's writes, simply because I'm only a nurse and a poet. If I had an English degree with Poetry has my focus, well then I might feel compelled to look at poems line by line.
Thanks for sharing. Feel free to comment as you feel the need. I feel like as long as it is constructive criticism that's fine.
Peace,
Laura |
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Re: once again
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by deathdrop on
Wednesday, 7th November 2007 @ 12:42:57 PM AEST
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| despite this being quite long, the way you've written it really dragged me into reading more and more. you have a real good use of words here. you point is understood. i'd feel the same in that kind of situation. good write. |
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Re: once again
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by BuTTerFly_LoVe on
Wednesday, 28th November 2007 @ 05:10:52 AM AEST
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| HAHA WWOAAH that was nicely written i give you a 100 lol i liked every part of that once again nicely written |
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