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Trying
Contributed by
simonedontplay
on
Tuesday, 20th November 2007 @ 12:58:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Trying
I tryed to look past my problems
An search for the sunlight instead
rocks, and dirt blocked my way ahead
I tryed to dive deep
in the happiness of the
ocean, but the waves
an commotion took over
I tryed to dig into my
hearts tunnel ended
up breathing through a funnel
, an was buried in plied up
by sin
I tryed to run to a friend
but backstabber had the
upper hand and made me fall
So i reached for the
true direction , which is god leading
to a brighter day, an then nothing blocked my way
Copyright ©
simonedontplay
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2007-11-20 00:58:25]
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Re: Trying
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by Rescue on
Tuesday, 20th November 2007 @ 02:44:32 AM AEST
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I think your poem is very nice. I would just suggest running a spell check before submitting. It makes it a little difficult to read and easier to misinterpret.
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Re: Trying
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th November 2007 @ 10:45:26 AM AEST
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| This is a great poem. Im glad that you found a way to get past those stumbling blocks! |
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