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Goodbye candle light
Contributed by
Ran
on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 04:19:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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The candle of life is slowly going out
Into the depths of despair Im fading
A shallow heart ,
A nightmare so painful
Cant tell .
Darkness is slowly taking over
I can not fight it ,
Its over ,
No more fight ,
No more fair ,
No more pain and agony ,
Only the dept of shadow ,
A pit as black as the night.
For some a cadge ,
For me freedom ,
The freedom I crave for ,
The candle of life is out ,
No more pain ,
Im free ,
Free at last .
Dont cry for me ,
I will al love you even in death
Dont worry ,
Just let me slit my wrist one more time
For one time ,
Eternal.
Copyright ©
Ran
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2007-12-06 04:19:33]
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Re: Goodbye candle light
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 08:22:49 AM AEST
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An eloquent farewell, one I hope is only fictional.
Take care,
David |
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Re: Goodbye candle light
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by yackerz85 on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 12:00:22 PM AEST
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I really like how you poetically describe what your doing throughout this piece and then in the last stanza, you bluntly state that your gonna slit your wrist. It carries a bit of shock to it. It is a great ending to such a despairing poem.
~Mark~ |
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Re: Goodbye candle light
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by emystar on
Friday, 7th December 2007 @ 09:46:57 AM AEST
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Iagree ti is incredibly written.
Welcome to our global family here at ypdc. I noticed you jus checked in with us but please don't check out on the same day you checked in.
Stick around we need writers like you.
Luv, huggs, prayer, peace, joy,knowlege, wisdom, faith, hope,
emy |
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