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Make Me Regret
Contributed by
EJXC-05
on
Friday, 7th December 2007 @ 09:50:21 AM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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Make Me Regret
12-4-07
Make me regret
Take me back
Down on my knee beg you please
Run away with me
I love you through and through
Now your really to move on to the new
I need you..
Between these sheets
Wishing me to be your every fantasy
Make me regret
Take me back
Down on my knee
Holding you closely
Trying with words
Crying in syllables
Pronouncing my undying love
I you love...need you
Fading away from your regret
Easing me back so you forget
Make me regret
Take me back
Down on my knee
Wishing you could think clearly
Clearly your mad
Look at me
Rethink your backward steps
Understand that my heart is now your heart
My soul is never letting you go!!
Make me regret
Take me back
Down on my knee
Give me my release
My high
My undying good bye
I love you through and through
As you woo me on to the new
I need you...
With every shadow door you creep through
Make me regret
Take me back
Down on my bleeding knees
Trying to make you rethink
In between your two way street
Whispering don't end our dream
Yelling out my pleased
Crazy every time you hold on to me
That I begain to lose...lose
But I lose my love to you..!
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Re: Make Me Regret
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by BuTTerFly_LoVe on
Friday, 7th December 2007 @ 10:30:52 AM AEST
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very emotional but deep ugggh touching
great write
Is there love like this anymore ??? I didn't think there was
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Re: Make Me Regret
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by JohnYamrus on
Saturday, 8th December 2007 @ 12:25:52 AM AEST
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ultimately this poem fails for sounding merely whiney and needy. additionally, please watch your spelling and grammar:
"Now your really to move on to the new"
you should be using "you're" and i don't have a clue why you're using "really" unless you meant "ready".
again...this line is senseless:
"Yelling out my pleased "
take time with your work. give the reader a reason to care about YOU as a writer and a person. a poem like this is only worth anything for you and the person it's about. it fails to cross the line where it gives the READER anything to care about. and that's what it's all about...communication. you asked for comments. i hope this helps.
john if you have any questions, please feel free to write me
john
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Re: Make Me Regret
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by JohnYamrus on
Saturday, 8th December 2007 @ 12:26:33 AM AEST
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ultimately this poem fails for sounding merely whiney and needy. additionally, please watch your spelling and grammar:
"Now your really to move on to the new"
you should be using "you're" and i don't have a clue why you're using "really" unless you meant "ready".
again...this line is senseless:
"Yelling out my pleased "
take time with your work. give the reader a reason to care about YOU as a writer and a person. a poem like this is only worth anything for you and the person it's about. it fails to cross the line where it gives the READER anything to care about. and that's what it's all about...communication. you asked for comments. i hope this helps.
if you have any questions, please feel free to write me
john
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