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This Day is Bright
Contributed by
Chamaron
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Friday, 7th December 2007 @ 04:43:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Lowering standards,
Senses as commanders,
Lives we dont understand,
Shortcuts come by demand.
Whats right doesnt feel it,
The heavens have concealed it.
Where do our eyes wander,
What mystery our minds ponder.
Space below equals reserved,
Conditions innocents havent deserved,
Connection proclaimed broken,
Hurtful words instead spoken.
Distance maintained,
Morals locked away, detained.
Alone unable to live with reflection,
Speaking emotions without inflection.
What limits the box possesses
Fallen back as life progresses.
Beauty called ugly to improve,
Fake mistakes unable to remove.
Unpopular to seek to learn,
Love defined as without concern.
Without anything at all to hallow,
Our lives have been made shallow.
Little time to leave a memory,
Without hope, we turned sensory,
Feeling around in darkness for light,
Without seeing that this day is bright.
Copyright ©
Chamaron
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2007-12-07 16:43:56]
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Re: This Day is Bright
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th December 2007 @ 07:47:32 PM AEST
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One of the most amazing "live in the moment' "don't take anything for granted" poems I have ever read. This is quite a work you have here. It says much more than those cliche quotes I have above. You define our world as past, present, above, below, and in a box. Yet no future is really mentioned. I feel this is because you seem to relay a thought that there is no future without making the present. Something we do little in true life, and this echoes loudly in your poem.
Amazing!
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Re: This Day is Bright
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by ki on
Saturday, 8th December 2007 @ 01:09:39 AM AEST
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| i enjoyed reading this poem |
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