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delicately undone. . .
Contributed by
elle
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Friday, 4th January 2008 @ 04:49:50 AM in AEST
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I am whisper
in the breezeway.
still reminder...
hushed & low.
silent witness,
I am balance.
simply longing,
I am woe.
sacred marking,
random finding.
I am bliss.
blown to & fro
radiant and yet illusive
delicately undone...
did you not know?
Copyright ©
elle
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2008-01-04 04:49:50]
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Re: delicately undone. . .
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 4th January 2008 @ 06:07:41 AM AEST
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Oooohhhh... I like this!!! It is a fast and furious but perfectly impactful (not too heavy, but good grief - not without its own distinct kind of quiet power) fabulous read. I love that it seems 'non-threatening' so to speak, but slides up next to the reader and slaps him/her in the face.... not in an overtly menancing way, but rather as a (poetic!) wake up call. It was, for me, round about the time that I hit the line "I am woe." that I felt my feet coming out from under me. Great write! Excellent job reigning it in and delivering it so incredibly effectively!
Yeh... wow. : )
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Re: delicately undone. . .
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by Honey56 on
Friday, 4th January 2008 @ 10:56:05 AM AEST
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| Very nice flow!!! |
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Re: delicately undone. . .
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by enigma on
Saturday, 5th January 2008 @ 02:11:21 AM AEST
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elle,
Yes, to all the above. The minimalist nature of this one very effectively wraps its arms around its reader; an spirit invitation to become absorbed, to discover, to know what is already known, but has been lost in the cocaphony of the daily hum-drum. This world's cultural and institutional noise drowns out pertinent knowledge and without knowledge we cannot understand, accept and Love. This poem is like a portal into a reality so few are able to enter. I loved it.
ron...enigma |
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Re: delicately undone. . .
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 26th January 2008 @ 07:20:28 PM AEST
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I know now
that you
flow
oh so excellently. |
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Re: delicately undone. . .
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th December 2008 @ 09:50:31 AM AEST
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incredible flow, your use of the english language is marvellous.
-phil |
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Re: delicately undone. . .
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 11:10:45 PM AEST
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| How perfectly awesome! |
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