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love...isn't a tragedy !
Contributed by
akshay
on
Friday, 4th January 2008 @ 05:04:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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It ws love...
that made me cry
and shed those salty tears
it broke my heart into a 100 pieces
the pain...i knew would continue 4 years
but then it did somethng else
it gave me new wings , broad and strong
to flt , to escape , to break free
to raise myself above the throng
OOOOOh...it glowed in my heart
it shone n sparkled in my eyes
the magic of it flew in my veins
my heart echoed with joyful cries
and i realized ...love isn't a tragedy !
it's a power ... a medicine
it gives u hope , it makes u dream
even in d deepest of depressions , it breaks out a grin
love is naughty....love is daring
love ditinguishes nt good or bad
oh yes ! it makes u blind
for it's d power u thot u nvr had
love is d touch u feel
on misty damp winter days
it's d warmth that races thru u
as those fingers feeel like glowing sun rays
LOVE IS D HUG U GET
WEN U R CRYING....ALONE N SAD
IT'S D EMOTION DT FILLS UR HERT
AND VANISHES ALL D PAINS U'VE EVER HAD
o yes ! love's mad...
it's crazy , insane , blind
it makes ur heart go wold
n takes sense away 4m ur mind
but dont be wary of it
jump into it....wenever u feel d need
for in the world ...dis world is held up..
.....by love indeed
.....by love indeed !
Copyright ©
akshay
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2008-01-04 17:04:35]
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Re: love...isn't a tragedy !
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by JohnYamrus on
Saturday, 5th January 2008 @ 05:58:11 AM AEST
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with that totally ridiculous and childish preamble/intro to your poem i went into it expecting more of the same...even worse. happily, i was very very wrong. your poem was well-crafted, intelligent and interesting. a prime example of how one should never judge a book by its cover. a word to the wise, though. if you're ever submitting something to a magazine, drop the kidspeak. it'd kill your chances in a heartbeat.
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Re: love...isn't a tragedy !
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by little_genna on
Saturday, 5th January 2008 @ 02:46:15 PM AEST
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i got about half way through before i gave up trying to read it. it is very hard to read with all the slang words and text speech. i would be willing to give it another go if it was typed correctly... i have to agree with john it does put people off....though what i managed to read had a really good start to a potentially amazing poem..
sorry if this sounds really critical and harsh i dont mean to be
all the best x |
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