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the journey
Contributed by
shendo
on
Tuesday, 8th January 2008 @ 02:51:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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The star all fix up
the bridge i must cross
if im going to get to you
this is what i must do
I risked it all before
whats so different now?
I Think it might
be Im in love this time
My feeling for you
have no bondries
if I couldn't control my body
they would run to you
I now rise through the seas
to fufill my destiny
Im almost to the end of my
great big journey
I have found you what am i to do?
I must admit my love for you
the stars are all in tune for you
the moon shines bright tonight for you
the bridge i cross rose up for you.
the jouney i made looking for you
i almost gave in
but when i thought of your lovely face
i would never stop
tears fell from theses eyes
when i thought that i could die
i was starting to break down
then i finaly found
what i was look for
there you were
staring at me with those eyes
i could only cry
the pain fades inside
to night when i say
i love you agian
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shendo
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2008-01-08 14:51:35]
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Re: the journey
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by conorshawn on
Tuesday, 8th January 2008 @ 02:54:24 PM AEST
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| needs a little tweaking and spell check but over all i like it. staright from the heart good write. |
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Re: the journey
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 8th January 2008 @ 06:21:31 PM AEST
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Good work. Keep writing.
big huggs,
emy |
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Re: the journey
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by ki on
Wednesday, 9th January 2008 @ 12:18:45 AM AEST
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not so bad for ur 1st try!! i liked it !! a few grammatical errors,but fixable!!keep it up!!
ki |
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