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The old man who drank himself
Contributed by
harmony
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Thursday, 10th January 2008 @ 07:59:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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Half a fish
The largest fish
Drying on the largest dish
The rich old man whos lunch it was
His future reflected in its eye
He mistook himself for a bottle of wine
He drunk himself and died
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harmony
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2008-01-10 07:59:26]
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Re: The old man who drank himself
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by Honey56 on
Thursday, 10th January 2008 @ 08:01:13 AM AEST
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Re: The old man who drank himself
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by SmokinJoeEvil on
Friday, 11th January 2008 @ 08:45:24 AM AEST
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I think it is great! I love the brevity... and the rhyming is so poignant. It reads like an old fable or story. To me it read like a man who, in seeing his future reflected in the fish's eye (be it his actual future, or just what he perceived of his future based on the activity in his life that brought him to this particular moment in time) becomes so disenchanted with his life, or so confounded by himself that he forgets his own actions... and does something unthinkably detrimental to himself.
Really, just great. I loved it. |
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