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Calling Mr. Custer
Contributed by
honey56
on
Tuesday, 22nd January 2008 @ 10:11:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Over in the valley of the stars
Filled with bow arrows and
Grass
Laying on their bellies crawling
Around
Trying to keep our hair
I think we need to contact Mr
Custer
Come on Mr Custer help us
Please
For we want look good without
Our hair
Its so cold over in this valley
You can tell how the stars twinkle
And drop the confetti
Frost is dripping off the moon
Freezing us straight down to our
Shoes
Please, Mr Custer
Bring us some thermal socks
Dont forget the long johns for its
Gave my knee frost bite
Who you out their?
Waiting to take our scalp
Dating will be no more for
Who want a bald head woman?
So well fighting to keep our hair
Into this valley of the stars
Its just know kidding around
Even thou the valley lights up
So beautiful
Its just a figment of your illusion
Come on Mr Custer
Please move a bit faster
If not well be force to stay in this
Permanent pose
With icicles hanging as confetti
Down in this valley of the stars
With icicles been our tomb...
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2008-01-22 10:11:00]
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Re: Calling Mr. Custer
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd January 2008 @ 01:09:47 PM AEST
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I noticed that you posted comments on a couple of my poems so i though id return the favour. I liked this poem, its different from what i am use to but I enjoyed it. It was humorous in a sense and some words make me feel what you were writing "Freezing us straight down to our
Shoes"
Good write, hope to hear more from you
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Re: Calling Mr. Custer
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by Harmony on
Wednesday, 23rd January 2008 @ 05:54:54 AM AEST
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| would you an icicle through your head than be bald ? :D |
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Re: Calling Mr. Custer
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by Tweeky on
Wednesday, 23rd January 2008 @ 06:04:57 AM AEST
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Thankyou so much for the comment , I appreciate it alot .
I have been reading through some of your work and you have a good way with word's.
I like this poem , it's light hearted and has a nice rythem.
Take care
xx |
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Re: Calling Mr. Custer
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by SamJoelle on
Thursday, 31st January 2008 @ 05:20:02 PM AEST
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i really like this it's neat!
Good job mate :] |
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