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Watcher
Contributed by
spike
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Wednesday, 5th March 2008 @ 10:37:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Sense the shadow in the corner, cold breath upon your neck? the sudden drop to sheer suspense thats me you have to check
Ill take you in a heartbeat while youre caught in mundane schemes; the misstep on a busy road just your time, it seems
The pip in the cherry, the weapon in the tools; life appears an endless dream Im here to wake the fools.
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spike
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2008-03-05 22:37:02] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Watcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 12:34:57 PM AEST (User
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'I'm here to wake the fools"...
Excellent last line. Overall I'd call it quite unique, not something I read everyday, and it was quite enjoyable to see your take on Death. Good job on this one. |
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Re: Watcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by brew on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 01:29:30 PM AEST (User
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Hmm. the sign of Death........scary yet, ....I cant find words. Your writes amaze me....
Brew~ |
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Re: Watcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th March 2008 @ 01:37:44 AM AEST (User
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My dear spike,
An interesting concept, of life an endless dream and we, merely fools rushing
about in a panic to get things done before we awaken. If fool I be, I am happy
to be awakened by death rather than some unhappy thought that life ISN'T a
dream, if you catch my drift. I love how you captured the essence of that "sudden"
finality that all are so surprised to witness, knowing full well it was on its way.
Excellent post, poet. Hope all is well with you and yours. ^_^
~Breezy |
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Re: Watcher
(User Rating: 1 ) by zenith66 on
Tuesday, 18th March 2008 @ 02:43:00 AM AEST (User
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yeah i loved this, the last line just summed up the whole piece with poetic excellence, lets hope this dream can last a little longer eh, fantastic wrting here well done!! |
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