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The ghost that haunts my soul
Contributed by
constantlyme
on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 04:30:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You’re what occupies my mind
What sets my skin on fire
The puzzle piece I long to find
The deepest of desires.
You’re what crawls beneath my skin
And penetrates my heart
The flame that I still keep within
The one that you helped start
You’re the ghost that haunts my soul
And keeps me from my sleep
The only thing I can’t control
The one that makes me weep.
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constantlyme
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2008-03-06 04:30:03]
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Re: The ghost that haunts my soul
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 05:45:06 AM AEST
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Very nice piece. I especially enjoyed the last stanza.
Keep writing.
Peace
~Shannon |
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Re: The ghost that haunts my soul
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by fielding88 on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 11:28:01 AM AEST
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| Yes, I agree with the above comment, I enjoyed your attention to structure, it flowed quite well, and the concepts you used as well as the words were nicely chosen. Good work. |
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Re: The ghost that haunts my soul
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by andrew13 on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 11:59:12 AM AEST
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| I'm very new to this game and don't know much about poetry yet, but I know that really touched me - especially the last stanza (the last two lines really hit home). Very nice work. |
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Re: The ghost that haunts my soul
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by irodethetrain2u on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 03:15:43 PM AEST
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| Great write. I enjoyed the flow and rhythm of it. Very touching. |
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Re: The ghost that haunts my soul
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by mrpeanut64 on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 04:10:07 PM AEST
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| Excellent write. Going through the same thing myself right now so this really touched me. Keep it up. |
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